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Mony differenl counfries hoye mosl shops ond producls os lhe sorne. Some consider it o posifiye development, whereos others consider it negoliye. Discuss bolh stdes ond give yout opinion.

Mony differenl counfries hoye mosl shops ond producls os lhe sorne. Some consider it o posifiye development, whereos others consider it negoliye. Discuss bolh stdes ond give yout opinion. mbGOO
It is indubitable that globalization has ushered in an era of similarities. People are divided on whether these likenesses are good or bad. This essay intends to analyze both perspectives. l, however, side with the former view. On the positive side, people have more choices, as now everything is available everywhere. Earlier, only locally made products were available, but now people are able to enjoy things from all over the world. For instance, earlier there were only two popular brands of shoes available in lndia, which were Bata and Carona, but today we have Reebok, Nike, Adidas, Puma and so many more. Similar examples can be cited for infinite number of other products. Therefore, in this regard, having similar shops and products is a positive thing. Secondly, people are becoming aware of other cultures and lifestyles through these products. They are becoming tolerant of each other. They have the choice of picking and adopting the best points of each culture, and as a consequence a global culture is emerging. The youth of today are adopting this culture and are wearing globally similar clothes, eating similar food, using similar cosmetics, having similar furniture in their homes and they are living similar lifestyles. Another benefit of this similar situation is that relations between countries are improving. When countries import or export their products, they develop bonds with each other, which is good for both. For instance, lndia exports tea and iron ore to other countries, and imports automobiles, refrigerators and televisions etcetera. lt is but obvious that countries, which are linked by trade, cannot afford to go against each other. On the other hand, these similarities are diluting the national identities. Our diversity is disappearing. lt is well known that diversity adds spice to life. Unfortunately, malls in any country have the same showrooms of the same brands that there is no charm of going anywhere for buying something unique. Another big demerit of all products being available everywhere is that the local businessman cannot compete with the international giants and is therefore going into oblivion. However, despite these disadvantages, I still believe that the advantages are much more. To sum up, similarity in shops and products has its dark and light side, but the pros definitely edge over the cons
It is indubitable that globalization has ushered in an era of similarities.
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People
are divided
on whether these

likenesses are
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good
or
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. This essay intends to analyze both perspectives.
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l
,
however
, side with the

former view.

On the
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positive
side,
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people
have more choices, as
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now
everything is
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available
everywhere. Earlier,
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only


locally
made
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products
were
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available
,
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but
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now
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people
are able to enjoy things from all over the world. For

instance, earlier there were
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only
two popular brands of shoes
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available
in
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lndia
, which were
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Bata
and

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Carona
,
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but
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today
we have Reebok, Nike, Adidas, Puma and
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so
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many
more.
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examples can
be cited


for infinite number of
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other
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products
.
Therefore
, in this regard, having
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similar
shops and
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products
is a

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positive
thing.

Secondly
,
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people
are becoming aware of
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other
cultures and lifestyles through these
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products
. They are

becoming tolerant of each
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other
. They have the choice of picking and adopting the best points of each

culture, and as a consequence a global culture is emerging. The youth of
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today
are adopting this culture

and are wearing globally
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similar
clothes, eating
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similar
food, using
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similar
cosmetics, having similar

furniture in their
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homes and
they are living
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similar
lifestyles.

Another benefit of this
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similar
situation is that relations between
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countries
are improving. When countries

import or export their
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products
, they develop bonds with each
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other
, which is
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good
for both.
For instance
,

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lndia
exports tea and iron ore to
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other
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countries
, and imports automobiles, refrigerators and televisions

etcetera.
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lt
is
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but
obvious that
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countries
, which
are linked
by trade, cannot afford to go against each other.

On the
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other
hand, these similarities are diluting the national identities. Our diversity is disappearing.
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lt
is

well known that diversity
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adds
spice to life. Unfortunately, malls in any
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country
have the same showrooms

of the same brands that there is no charm of going anywhere for buying something unique. Another
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big


demerit of all
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products
being
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available
everywhere is that the local businessman cannot compete with the

international giants and is
therefore
going into oblivion.
However
, despite these disadvantages, I
still


believe that the advantages are much more.

To sum up, similarity in shops and
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products
has its dark and light side,
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but
the pros definitely edge over the cons
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IELTS essay Mony differenl counfries hoye mosl shops ond producls os lhe sorne. Some consider it o posifiye development, whereos others consider it negoliye. Discuss bolh stdes ond give yout opinion.

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
378 words
5.5
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