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# Modern technology has a great impact on our environment. Some say that people should adopt a simple lifestyle to solve the problem while others argue that the technology itself should provide a solution. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.5

# Modern technology has a great impact on our environment. Some say that people should adopt a simple lifestyle to solve the problem while others argue that the technology itself should provide a solution. 5
Technology provides the plethora of benefits for the people. The bitter truth is that it's harmful for climate as well. Some segment of people accepts that it's all about the individual lifestyle and technology helped lot in control of the environment. But others believe in the opposite directions. I will discuss both of these views before forming an opinion. The new innovations are increasingly helping in the development of our nation, also the individuals are responsible to keep clean the surrounding. Of course, some of the people step in to control in managing electricity at their home by not wasting or over using. In addition to the individuals are polluting the air in some how. For instance, most of the people are going to office on a daily basis, but if they share their vehicles with others and obviously they can take benefit out of it such as saving cost and reduce air pollution. So individuals should have to utilize the machinery in a proper manner. On the other hand, Although the modern world raised by help of many innovations and using in our daily routine life, some of the people still wanted to tackle the environmental issues by itself. The new innovations are heavily involved in cleaning the location. For instance, our society members are just throwing the waste in the bin, however the machines are used to clear it and move out of living areas. So the modern automation somehow working for us to maintain the climate and there should be some portions of individual responsibility to neat and fit our environment. To conclude, our modern work running with the innovated mechanism and it gives the greater impact on our environment. Therefore, it is our joint responsibility to tackle the problem by simple lifestyle with the utilization of technology.
Technology provides the plethora of benefits for the
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people
. The bitter truth is that it's harmful for climate
as well
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
segment of
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people
accepts that it's all about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
lifestyle and technology
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
lot in control of the environment.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
others believe in the opposite directions. I will discuss both of these views
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before
forming an opinion.

The new innovations are
increasingly
helping in the development of our nation,
also
the
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individuals
are responsible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
clean the surrounding.
Of course
,
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
step in to control in managing electricity at their home by not wasting or over using.
In addition
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
are polluting the air in
Did you mean "somehow"?
some how
.
For instance
, most of the
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people
are going to office on a daily basis,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
if they share their vehicles with others and
obviously
they can take benefit out of it such as saving cost and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
air pollution.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
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individuals
should
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
utilize the machinery
Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with the adverb for "proper"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a proper manner
.

On the other hand
, Although the modern world raised by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
innovations and using in our daily routine life,
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
still
wanted to tackle the environmental issues by itself. The new innovations are
heavily
involved in cleaning the location.
For instance
, our society members are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
throwing the waste in the bin,
however
the machines are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
it and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
out of living areas.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
the modern automation somehow working for us to maintain the climate and there should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
portions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
responsibility to neat and fit our environment.

To conclude
, our modern work running with the innovated mechanism and it gives the greater impact on our environment.
Therefore
, it is our joint responsibility to tackle the problem by simple lifestyle with the utilization of technology.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay # Modern technology has a great impact on our environment. Some say that people should adopt a simple lifestyle to solve the problem while others argue that the technology itself should provide a solution. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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