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Modern technology computer games playing

Modern technology computer games playing PEnEd
A large proportion of adults new enjoy playing computer games during their free time. In my opinion this is a result of development in mobile technology since computer games encourage passivity firstly nowadays youngsters mostly spend time playing computer games. now it is possible play games on laptop computer and smartphone it is very bad habits. some workers use the mobile phone on the work. in the other hand mobile phone is so many benefits. firstly income sources. people give the online jobs, online develiry we can income of house. secondly, mobile phone use on education. some students use the mobile phn and boost your mind. students improve our self confidence. then mobile phone entertainment source. we can watch the movies comandy show films and listen online songs
A large proportion of adults new enjoy playing computer
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games
during their free time. In my opinion this is a result of development in mobile technology since computer
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games
encourage passivity
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nowadays youngsters
mostly
spend time playing computer
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games
.
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now
it is possible play
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games
on laptop computer and smartphone it is
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very
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habits.
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some
workers
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use
the mobile
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on the work.
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in
the other hand mobile
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phone
is
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many
benefits.
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income sources.
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people
give the online jobs, online
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develiry
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can income
of
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secondly
, mobile
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use
on education.
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some
students
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the mobile
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and boost your mind.
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students
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our
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self confidence
.
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then
mobile
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phone
entertainment source.
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we
can
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watch
the movies
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comandy
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films and listen online
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songs
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IELTS essay Modern technology computer games playing

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
127 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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