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Modern families nowadays have to face many new problems. What are the main problems they have to deal with?

Modern families nowadays have to face many new problems. What are the main problems they have to deal with? KwVN6
There is no doubt that each family is in essence a microcosm of the larger society because it is the reflection and representation of a community or a certain nation. Nevertheless, a huge number of modern households have encountered many challenges as family structure transforms over time. From my perspective, there are three main issues that modern families have experienced. To begin with, one of the most acute problems, many families have to tackle is divorcing and child custody disputes between spouses. The reason that leads to unexpected divorces is lack of mutual understanding and unsolved conflicts related to parenting or financial burden between wives and husbands. Lots of married couples decide to end up parting ways and exert themselves to dispute their child custody, regardless of its negative impacts on child psychology. Additionally, by virtue of economic pressure, most of working parents have neglected their children and had no quality time to spend with them. In this day and age, in a society where lots of families have dual-income, hence, they do not have sufficient time to take care of their children. Due to the deficiency in parental attention and care, children might be deeply involved in activities that do them harm such as screen addiction and playing truant from school. Finally, another aching issue that happens commonly in most families is domestic violence as well as child abuse. Although domestic violence is strictly prohibited in the world, the Vietnamese authorities have not legislated to this problem and handled thoroughly. The dysfunction of modern families results from domestic maltreatment or sexism that makes family dynamic become feeble, and all family members can not closely interact with each other. To summarize, I want to emphasize that a family plays a crucial role in everyone's life because the love and care we receive from family members is of inestimable and irreplaceable value. Therefore, each one should make efforts and contribute to build a close-knit and harmonious family system.
There is no doubt that each
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family
is in essence a microcosm of the larger society
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because
it is the reflection and representation of a community or a certain nation.
Nevertheless
, a huge number of modern households have encountered
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many
challenges as
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family
structure transforms over time. From my perspective, there are three main issues that modern
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families
have experienced.

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begin
with, one of the most acute problems,
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many
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families
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have to
tackle is divorcing and
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child
custody disputes between spouses. The reason that leads to unexpected divorces is lack of mutual understanding and unsolved conflicts related to parenting or financial burden between wives and husbands. Lots of married couples decide to
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end
up parting ways and exert themselves to dispute their
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child
custody, regardless of its
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negative
impacts on
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child
psychology.

Additionally
, by virtue of economic pressure,
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most of working
parents have neglected their children and had no quality time to spend with them. In this day and age, in a society where lots of
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families
have dual-income,
hence
, they do not have sufficient time to take care of their children. Due to the deficiency in parental attention and care, children might be
deeply
involved in activities that do them harm such as screen addiction and playing truant from school.

Finally
, another aching issue that happens
commonly
in most
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families
is domestic violence
as well
as
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child
abuse. Although domestic violence is
strictly
prohibited in the world, the Vietnamese authorities have not legislated to this problem and handled
thoroughly
. The dysfunction of modern
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families
results from domestic maltreatment or sexism that
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makes
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family
dynamic become feeble, and all
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family
members can not
closely
interact with each other.

To summarize
, I want to emphasize that a
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family
plays a crucial role in everyone's life
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because
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and care we receive from
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family
members is of inestimable and irreplaceable value.
Therefore
, each one should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
efforts and contribute to build a close-knit and harmonious
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family
system.
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IELTS essay Modern families nowadays have to face many new problems. What are the main problems they have to deal with?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
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