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Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. Do you agree or disagree?

Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. W9q5
The impact of innovations and inventions in our daily lives has increased dramatically. Most homes these days have, at the very least, a washing machine and a microwave, yet this has had both positive and negative effects. Although there are definitely some improvements (it would now be difficult to live without them), the negatives are equally definable. Primarily, the fact that these appliances have to be paid for, serviced, repaired and replaced means that we need to work to maintain this cycle. For example, in some countries the average washing machine is two or three weeks’ wages for most people. Considering the product’s life span, it can be estimated that we are working at least two or three days a year simply to cover the cost of the appliance, a calculation which is multiplied by all the appliances we acquire. In addition, an increasing number of appliances are for purposes that were not previously considered necessities, but through marketing techniques, manipulative advertising and human nature we are now keen to acquire them. Electric juice makers are a perfect example. Of course, there are appliances which in their basic format have improved our lifestyle simply because of the labour they save. The washing machine, which saves hours every week on handwashing, is an example of this. It is only when such appliances develop functions beyond their basic use, that they become more expensive but more desirable because of the addition of these extra functions that most of us never use. It can therefore be concluded that only by carefully considering the use and relevance of the appliances we buy, can we say that they have improved our lifestyle.
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lives
has increased
dramatically
. Most homes these days have, at the
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very
least, a washing machine and a microwave,
yet
this has had both
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positive
and
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negative
effects. Although there are definitely
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some
improvements (it would
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now
be difficult to
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live
without them), the negatives are
equally
definable.

Primarily
, the fact that these
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appliances
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have to
be paid
for, serviced, repaired and replaced means that we need to work to maintain this cycle.
For example
, in
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some
countries the average washing machine is two or three weeks’ wages for most
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people
. Considering the product’s life span, it can
be estimated
that we are working at least two or three days a year
simply
to cover the cost of the
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appliance
, a calculation which
is multiplied
by all the
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appliances
we acquire.

In addition
, an increasing number of
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appliances
are for purposes that were not previously considered necessities,
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but
through marketing techniques, manipulative advertising and human nature we are
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now
keen to acquire them. Electric juice makers are a perfect example.

Of course
, there are
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appliances
which in their basic format have
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improved
our lifestyle
simply
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because
of the
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labour
they save. The washing machine, which saves hours every week on handwashing, is an example of this. It is
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only
when such
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appliances
develop functions beyond their basic
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use
, that they become more expensive
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but
more desirable
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because
of the addition of these extra functions that most of us never
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use
.

It can
therefore
be concluded
that
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only
by
carefully
considering the
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use
and relevance of the
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appliances
we
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buy
, can we say that they have
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improved
our lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
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