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Mobile phones should be banned in public places. Do you agree with the statement?

Mobile phones should be banned in public places. Nma6N
It is commonly believed that it would be a better idea to prohibit using gadgets in public places. This essay agrees with this opinion, because the constant use of phones may cause plenty of problems to people and consequences of their actions might be horrifying at the end. The primary reason why government must take into consideration the idea of a complete ban of mobile phones is the difficulties it may cause. Disrespect to others can be seen more often in current time. To make it clearer, we can see situations in galleries or museums, where people are not listening to the speech of their guide, having troubled the lecturer by being disrespectful, even annoying by staring at the screens of their phones, while the person there is just trying to make a speech to explain and clarify the information for visitors. Another reason why further restrictions should be taken is because of the outcomes, that are more likely to be noticed negative and, moreover, catastrophic from time to time. In particular, having a conversation on mobile phone while driving a car can be the main reason why an overwhelming number of accidents occur nowadays. For example, according to recent research made by fact-statistic. com, approximately 20% of fatal accidents happen due to distraction of drivers, who were using cellphones while reaching their destination. In conclusion, mobile phones must not be used in generally open and accessible to people places because of issues and troubles caused by this action, and detrimental effects which may even lead to terrible outcomes.
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to prohibit using gadgets in public places. This essay
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with this opinion,
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the constant
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use
of
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phones
may cause
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plenty
of problems to
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people
and consequences of their actions might be horrifying at the
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end
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The primary reason why
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government
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must
take into consideration the
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idea
of a complete ban of mobile
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phones
is the difficulties it may cause. Disrespect to others can be
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seen
more
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in
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time. To
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make
it clearer, we can
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see
situations in galleries or museums, where
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people
are not listening to the speech of their guide, having troubled the lecturer by being disrespectful, even annoying by staring at the screens of their
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phones
, while the person there is
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just
trying to
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make
a speech to
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explain
and clarify the information for visitors.

Another reason why
further
restrictions should
be taken
is
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of the outcomes, that are more likely to
be noticed
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negative
and,
moreover
, catastrophic from time to time.
In particular
, having a conversation on mobile
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phone
while driving a car can be the main reason why an overwhelming number of accidents occur nowadays.
For example
, according to recent research made by fact-statistic.
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com
, approximately 20% of fatal accidents happen due to distraction of drivers, who were using cellphones while reaching their destination.

In conclusion
, mobile
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phones
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must
not be
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used
in
generally
open and accessible to
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people
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places
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of issues and troubles caused by this action, and detrimental effects which may even lead to terrible outcomes.
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IELTS essay Mobile phones should be banned in public places.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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