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mi familia en un dia de verano

mi familia en un dia de verano Gn1B

My family and I have been planning to go to a park some time ago. But today is the day to go and we are all very excited. my family rented a car so we could all go in it. While I'm sitting eating a delicious ice cream, I'm watching my whole family enjoy this sunny day. My mom's doing yoga under an apple tree, she loves nature. She's wearing a purple blouse and some leggings. Blue and a pink towel where she's sitting. Being in touch with his girlfriend is very important to my Diego cousin. That's why he's sitting making video calls with her. He's showing you how people are having fun. He's wearing a blue shirt, black pants and black shoes. My nephews Sofia and Martin are playing with their dolls in the sand. Martin's wearing a blue shirt and coffee pants. Sofia's wearing a green blouse and orange pants. My light aunt is driving her daughter, my cousin Camila, on the swing. My aunt has a beautiful purple dress and my cousin Camila is wearing an orange dress. My carlos cousin and his girlfriend Andrea are taking advantage of this sunny day and they're jogging. My cousin has a yellow shirt and black sports pants, his girlfriend is wearing shorts and a red blouse My veronica's on the lawn reading some fashion magazines. She's wearing a blue skirt, wearing an orange blouse and she's eating some fruit she brought in her basket. My Uncle Santiago is walking his pet princess. He's also having a delicious, fresh lemonade for a hot day like today's. He's wearing a blue shirt and brown pants.

My family and I have been planning to go to a park This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 time ago. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
 is the day to Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).go, and
go and
 we are all This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 excited. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterMy
my
 family rented a car This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 we could all go in it.

While I'm sitting eating a delicious ice cream, I'm watching my whole family enjoy this sunny day.

My mom's doing yoga under an apple tree, she This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admiresadores
loves
 nature. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermother
She's
 wearing a purple blouse and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 leggings. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblue-green
Blue
 and a pink towel where You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermother
she's
 sitting.

Being in touch with his girlfriend is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 to my Diego You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelative
cousin
. That's why You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
he's
 sitting making video calls with her. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
He's
 showing you how This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 are having fun. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
He's
 wearing a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblue-green
blue
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblousetunicturtleneckjerseypullover
shirt
, black You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrousersunderpantsshortsslacksknickers
pants
 and black shoes.

My nephews Sofia and Martin are playing with their dolls in the sand. Martin's wearing a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblue-green
blue
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblousetunicturtleneckjerseypullover
shirt
 and coffee You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrousersunderpantsshortsslacksknickers
pants
. Sofia's wearing a green blouse and orange pants.

My light aunt is driving her daughter, my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelative
cousin
 Camila, on the swing. My aunt has a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :gorgeousstunning
beautiful
 purple dress and my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelative
cousin
 Camila is wearing an orange dress.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
My
Possible spelling mistake found.CarlosCarlocarolscargos
carlos
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelative
cousin
 and his girlfriend Andrea are taking advantage of this sunny Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).day, and
day and
 they're jogging. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrelative
cousin
 has a yellow You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblousetunicturtleneckjerseypullover
shirt
 and black sports You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrousersunderpantsshortsslacksknickers
pants
, his girlfriend is wearing shorts and a red Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphblouse.blouse!blouse?blouse:blouse,blouse;
blouse


Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
My
 veronica's on the lawn reading This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 fashion magazines. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermother
She's
 wearing a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblue-green
blue
 skirt, wearing an orange Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).blouse, and
blouse and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermother
she's
 eating This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 fruit she brought in her basket.

My Uncle Santiago is walking his pet princess. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
He's
also
 having a delicious, fresh lemonade for a hot day like This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
's. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
He's
 wearing a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblue-green
blue
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withblousetunicturtleneckjerseypullover
shirt
 and brown You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrousersunderpantsshortsslacksknickers
pants
. 