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Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem might such measures cause? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem might such measures cause? v. 2
Although crop production demands more land space than meat production, there are a staggering proportion of meat eaters around the world. There is a widespread perception exists among several people such as the land space is shrinking at all quarters of the earth and consequently meat consumption must be controlled. In this essay we shall see some measures on how meat consumption can be controlled and will there be any challenges in implementing the steps. To begin with, a considerable level of awareness and sensitisation should be made in our society such a way, that people must be able to understand the benefits of abandoning eating meat. Various surveys illustrate that the consumption of red meat is the primary cause of chronic cancer and diabetes. Furthermore, increasing the number of livestock like cattle and sheep stimulate a devastating effect on our earth’s atmosphere, as these livestock releases huge amounts of methane gas to our atmosphere which in turn produces adversities and depletes our ozone layer. This message should be included in the school curriculum so that the children will be educated thereby, they will share this message with their parents and to their extended family. Having said all that, we don’t live in a society of utopia. Therefore, we cannot expect people to comprehend such noble message very soon. We cannot expect their full co-operation in neither abandoning nor reducing consumption of meat. If we enforce steps to abandon meat production, it would trigger a huge uproar and widespread condemnation from all quarters against human rights and privileges. To recapitulate, meat consumption has to be controlled with an iron fist. If not, this would swallow all our pastures and greeneries from our earth, thereby making our land space as unfit for cultivation or agriculture.
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production, there are a staggering proportion of
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meat
eaters around the world. There is a widespread perception exists among several
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people
such as the land space is shrinking at all quarters of the earth and
consequently
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meat
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consumption
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must
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some
measures on how
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meat
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consumption
can
be controlled
and will there be any challenges in implementing the steps.

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begin
with, a considerable level of awareness and
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sensitisation
should
be made
in our society such a way, that
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people
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must
be able to understand the benefits of abandoning eating
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meat
. Various surveys illustrate that the
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consumption
of red
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meat
is the primary cause of chronic cancer and diabetes.
Furthermore
, increasing the number of livestock like cattle and sheep stimulate a devastating effect on our earth’s atmosphere, as these livestock releases huge amounts of methane gas to our atmosphere which in turn produces adversities and depletes our ozone layer. This message should
be included
in the school curriculum
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so
that the children will
be educated
thereby, they will share this message with their parents and to their extended family.

Having said all that, we don’t
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live
in a society of utopia.
Therefore
, we cannot
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expect
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people
to comprehend such noble message
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very
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soon
. We cannot
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expect
their full co-operation in neither abandoning nor reducing
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consumption
of
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meat
. If we enforce steps to abandon
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meat
production, it would trigger a huge uproar and widespread condemnation from all quarters against human rights and privileges.

To recapitulate,
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meat
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consumption
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has to
be controlled
with an iron fist. If not, this would swallow all our pastures and
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greeneries
from our earth, thereby making our land space as unfit for cultivation or agriculture.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem might such measures cause? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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