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Marrying in thirties vs. Marrying before thirty

Marrying in thirties vs. Marrying before thirty 56mOQ
first of all what is marriage? marriage is considered to be a relationship between two people where they are expected to live and lead their lives together. In my point of view marriage is not something which is based on our age. we can enter into marriage whenever we are believe that we are ready to take up the responsibility. so now lets see the difference that takes in our life when we marry at 30's and when we marry before 30's. when we marry before our 30's we tend to understand our partners very well. we can grow together financially and emotionally in our lives. we can set goals together and we can run towards our goals together. the major drawback is that girls have to leave their parents home quicker and a great responsibility is passed on to them. when we marry after 30's, we normally settle in our life. then we may not have any burden of reaching goals as we are already settled down. so that in the beggining of the relationship there our life will be fillied only with happiness later if there is any loss in our life financially we cannot be able to share that with our partners as we have only shared happiness from the very beggining. so by marry before 30's will provide you a relationship that is long lasting and understandable.
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first
of all what is
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marriage
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marriage
is considered
to be a relationship between two
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people
where they are
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to
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live
and lead their
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lives
together. In my point of view
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marriage
is not something which
is based
on our age.
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we
can enter into
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marriage
whenever we are
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believe
that we are ready to take up the responsibility.
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so
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now
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lets
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see
the difference that takes in our
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life
when we
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marry
at
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30's
and when we
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marry
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before
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30's
.

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when
we
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marry
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before
our
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30's
we tend to understand our partners
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very
well.
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we
can grow together
financially
and
emotionally
in our
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lives
.
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we
can set goals
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together and
we can run towards our goals together.
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the
major drawback is that girls
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have to
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leave
their parents home quicker and a great responsibility
is passed
on to them.

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when
we
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marry
after
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30's
, we
normally
settle in our
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life
.
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then
we may not have any burden of reaching goals as we are already settled down.
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so
that in the
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beggining
of the relationship there our
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life
will be
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fillied
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only
with happiness later if there is any loss in our
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life
financially
we cannot be able to share that with our partners as we have
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only
shared happiness from the
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very
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beggining
.

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so
by
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marry
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before
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30's
will provide you a relationship
that is
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long lasting
and understandable.
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IELTS essay Marrying in thirties vs. Marrying before thirty

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
231 words
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