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Many young people regularly change their jobs over the years. What are the reasons for this? 2bxlM
I hate wet and rainy days. It rained a lot in 1816. . . . a lot - like every day; the weather in Europe was abnormally wet because it rained in Switzerland on 130 out of the 183 days from April to September. If I was Mary Shelley I might decide to write a book too After all, it was the only thing you could do without TV or anything. She said that she "passed the summer of 1816 in the environs of Geneva. . . we occasionally amused ourselves with some German stories of ghosts. . . These tales excited in us a playful desire of imitation" So, people were stuck inside and bored. Mary Shelley decided to write a book because it was so awful outside. I can totally see her point, you know? I guess I would write a novel if there was nothing else to do.
I hate wet and rainy days.

It rained a lot in 1816.
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like every day; the weather in Europe was
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it rained in Switzerland on 130 out of the 183 days from April to September. If I was Mary Shelley I might decide to write a book too
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, it was the
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only
thing you could do without TV or anything. She said that she
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passed the summer of 1816 in the environs of Geneva.
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we
occasionally
amused ourselves with
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some
German stories of ghosts.
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These tales excited in us a playful desire of imitation
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"
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So
,
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people
were stuck
inside and bored. Mary Shelley decided to write a book
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because
it was
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so
awful outside. I can
totally
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her point, you know? I guess I would write a novel if there was nothing else to do.

IELTS essay Many young people regularly change their jobs over the years. What are the reasons for this?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
151 words
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