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Many young people presently know more about international celebrities than famous people from their history. What are the causes? Give solutions to increase awareness of impactful people in history.

It is true that modern celebrities are more famous compared with historical heroes among younger generations. The fact that the majority of young people are illiterate on their history. Therefore, recording a variety of real based movies about the life of historical people is a satisfactory solution in my opinion. Admittedly, it is unavoidable to meet adults who have not enough knowledge about their history. One of the main reason is that many history books are tedious as well as the way of teaching is also dull. It means all given emphasis are on dates or other circumstances and history teachers do not attract pupils to classes. According to the investigation of Stanford university professors, more than half student who study history field, interested in biography of modern celebrities rather than historical figures, for example. An effective way to tackle this problem is that historical figures should be revived(qayta uyg’onish) again via mass media in order to being famous in the modern world. This could be in the form of recording new movies or serials that should be established by cooperation with the government and movie directories. This kind of movies lead to get to know better about people who lived long years ago. The historical personages that supported and released by Turkish ministry of media, could be a striking example, I think. To conclude, a higher illiteracy rate in history among young people causes to increase unawareness of vital people in history. That is why, I support it would be a workable solution to creating more historical movies instead of fantastic fictions.
It is true that modern celebrities are more
famous
compared with
historical
heroes among younger generations. The fact that the majority of young
people
are illiterate on their
history
.
Therefore
, recording a variety of real based
movies
about the life of
historical
people
is a satisfactory solution in my opinion.

Admittedly
, it is unavoidable to
meet
adults who have not
enough
knowledge about their
history
. One of the main reason is that
many
history
books are tedious
as well
as the way of teaching is
also
dull. It means all
given
emphasis are on dates or other circumstances and
history
teachers do not attract pupils to classes. According to the investigation of
Stanford university
professors, more than half student who study
history
field, interested in biography of modern celebrities
rather
than
historical
figures,
for example
.

An effective way to tackle this problem is that
historical
figures should
be revived
(
qayta
uyg
onish
) again via mass media in order to
being
famous
in the modern world. This could be in the form of recording new
movies
or serials that should
be established
by cooperation with the
government
and
movie
directories. This kind of
movies
lead to
get
to know better about
people
who
lived
long years ago. The
historical
personages that supported and released by Turkish ministry of media, could be a striking example, I
think
.

To conclude
, a higher illiteracy rate in
history
among young
people
causes
to increase
unawareness of vital
people
in
history
.
That is
why, I support it would be a
workable
solution to creating more
historical
movies
instead
of fantastic fictions.
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IELTS essay Many young people presently know more about international celebrities than famous people from their history. What are the causes? Give solutions to increase awareness of impactful people in history.

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