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Write about the following topic: Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

: Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? Ng1g
Now a days many people are doing jobs, due to work load they are not doing exercise properly neither not doing it. People are not doing exercise for their spare time because they need some relaxation. After sometimes it causes lot of health issues. Some organizations are arranged some exercise practitioner for their employees to make them healthier and relaxed. Firstly, all the mankind's are working but not doing exercise for work location and not doing in their free time due to job pardon not doing it. So they got more stress and tired. In this reason their productivity and performance is low. For example, if they person is working hard but there is no relaxation then, they will get more stress on it after sometimes they will get bored. Secondly, the employers must arrange some exercise program so that they will get some refreshment and healthier. For example, the organization must poster exercise tips in order to doing their desk itself or arrange someone to create exercise program by weekly in common place or in desk. In my point of view people should take simple exercise tips and doing it everyday, so that, they will get some refreshments.
Now a days
many
people
are
doing
jobs, due to work load they are not
doing
exercise
properly
neither not
doing
it.
People
are not
doing
exercise
for their spare time
because
they need
some
relaxation.
After
sometimes
it causes
lot of
health issues.
Some
organizations
are arranged
some
exercise
practitioner for their employees to
make
them healthier and relaxed.

Firstly
, all the mankind's are working
but
not
doing
exercise
for work location and not
doing
in their free time due to job pardon not
doing
it.
So
they
got
more
stress
and tired. In this reason their productivity and performance is low.
For example
, if
they person
is working
hard
but
there is no relaxation then, they will
get
more
stress
on it after
sometimes
they will
get
bored.

Secondly
, the employers
must
arrange
some
exercise
program
so
that they will
get
some
refreshment and healthier.
For example
, the organization
must
poster
exercise
tips in order to
doing
their desk itself or arrange someone to create
exercise
program by weekly in common place or in desk.

In my point of view
people
should take simple
exercise
tips and
doing
it
everyday
,
so
that, they will
get
some
refreshments.
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IELTS essay : Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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4 paragraphs
199 words
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