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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. B9gV
There are divided opinions regarding the bad situation where a group states that it is better for people to admit that; while, others counter claim that person has to try to improve that type of problems, Therefore, before commending my point of view both the side of arguments would be elaborated further. The proponents of the former part of the topic have their own arguments. To begin with, people need to accept the bad situations when they are hopeless, restricted, and not have long-term solutions for them. For example, those who belong from a family where they always have financial problems. so for that, a person, instead of wasting time in finding a satisfactory job, should go for the unsatisfactory work therefore by this they can start earning money which will be invested on paying bills, medicines for their elderly people. However, those who support the latter part of the discussion advocate that the most importantly, challenges are constant in everyone's life. An everyday person would expose to a number of problems. And, if they always accept it despite resolving; consequently, they would not achieve success in their future life. Moreover, by improving those detrimental situations people would have better experience also would improve their efficiency level. To conclude, arriving on my opinion although many opine that it is ideal to stay with bad situations, I believe that person must execute their efforts in order to improve that issue. Because it enhances working abilities and a person will have rewarding outcomes.
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are divided
opinions regarding the
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bad
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situation
where a group states that it is better for
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people
to admit that; while, others
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counter claim
that
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person
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has to
try to
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improve
that type of problems,
Therefore
,
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before
commending my point of view both the side of arguments would
be elaborated
further
. The proponents of the former part of the topic have their
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own
arguments. To
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begin
with,
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people
need to accept the
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bad
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situations
when they are hopeless, restricted, and not have long-term solutions for them.
For example
, those who belong from a family where they always have financial problems.
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so
for that, a
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person
,
instead
of wasting time in finding a satisfactory job, should go for the unsatisfactory work
therefore
by this they can
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start
earning money which will
be invested
on paying bills, medicines for their elderly
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people
.
However
, those who support the latter part of the discussion advocate that the most
importantly
, challenges are constant in everyone's life. An everyday
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person
would expose to a number of problems. And, if they always accept it despite resolving;
consequently
, they would not achieve success in their future life.
Moreover
, by improving those detrimental
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situations
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people
would have better experience
also
would
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improve
their efficiency level.

To conclude
,
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arriving on
my opinion although
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many
opine that it is ideal to stay with
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bad
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situations
, I believe that
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person
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must
execute their efforts in order to
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improve
that issue.
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Because
it enhances working abilities and a
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person
will have rewarding outcomes.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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