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MANY PEOPLE WORK LONG HOURS, LEAVING VERY LITTLE TIME FOR LEISURE ACTIVITIES. DOES THIS SITUATION HAS MORE ADVANTAGES OR MORE DISADVANTAGES?

MANY PEOPLE WORK LONG HOURS, LEAVING VERY LITTLE TIME FOR LEISURE ACTIVITIES. DOES THIS SITUATION HAS MORE ADVANTAGES OR MORE DISADVANTAGES? n61wP

In the contemporary world, time is always in luck because of jobs. So people have limited timings for relaxation. I think that overwork has more drawbacks than benefits. One obvious advantage of having hard work is its salary. In other words, if you have difficult work, you will get more money. For example, one of the toughest speciality -doctors have more payments. Despite this there are some significant disadvantages of working for a long duration. Firstly, it can involve too much pressure, which is very harassed for health. For instance, crowds of people in India suffer from depression and stress-related problems because of overwork. Secondly, people who have less hours for their hobbies sacrifice of family life. Since they spend more time for job, they get less time for family activities. As a result, the number of divorces is increasing highly. In conclusion, even working more and having less duration leisure activities gives more money, it can cause serious problems with health. I hope, the government will solve this issues.

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because
 of jobs. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 have limited timings for relaxation. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that overwork has more drawbacks than benefits.

One obvious advantage of having This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 work is its salary. In other words
, if you have difficult work, you will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 more money. For example
, one of the toughest Possible spelling mistake. 'speciality' is British English.specialty
speciality
 -doctors have more payments.

Despite this there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 significant disadvantages of working for a long duration. Firstly
, it can involve too much pressure, which is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 harassed for health. For instance
, crowds of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 in India suffer from depression and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stress
-related problems This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of overwork. Secondly
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 who have Did you mean "fewer hours"?fewer hours
less hours
 for their hobbies sacrifice of family life. Since they spend more time for job, they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 less time for family activities. As a result
, the number of divorces is increasing highly
.

In conclusion
, even working more and having less duration leisure activities gives more money, it can cause serious problems with health. I hope, the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 will solve this issues. 