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Many people think that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds.

Many people think that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds. BJ7QX
Human is responsible for a variety of environmental problem. There has long been controversy on overspending on protecting wildlife and some people think too much attention is spent on such issue. I totally agree that more resources should be allocated to other practical aspects instead of focusing too much on preserving wildlife. Among all the reasons, probably the most significant one is that if the government attaches inordinate importance on protecting wildlife, other public services may be neglected of their needs for more resources such as housing and welfare. One of the roles of the government is to ensure the sustainable life of citizens such as provide public services to help a country function properly. When too much funding is given to preserve wildlife but not maintain the quality of public service, people would be dissatisfied. The overloaded medical system is a striking example and it has long been a hot issue as the queuing time at public hospitals is too long while the underprivileged are not able to afford private service. Their rights to receive fair treatment is deprived. Citizens would feel that the government has turned a blind eye on their plight and in turn lower their sense of satisfaction to the government. Never should we overlook that fact that taxpayers give their hard-earned money to the government but it is not fair if they cannot enjoy the benefits. The government should place citizens' interest at their first priority when they plan for resource allocation. Medical resources, housing and infrastructures are directly related to citizens' quality of life, while seeing blue sky and birds are luxury. It is not saying that we shall neglect the importance of protecting nature, but we should make a balance to put citizens' interest at the first consideration. Under this line of thinking, although preserving nature deserve our attention, never should the government overlook that maintaining citizens' quality of life is also fulfilling the role of government.
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be allocated
to other practical aspects
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government
attaches inordinate importance on protecting wildlife, other
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public
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services
may
be neglected
of their needs for more resources such as housing and welfare. One of the roles of the
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government
is to ensure the sustainable life of citizens such as provide
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public
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services
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help
a country function
properly
. When too
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much


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funding
is
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given
to preserve wildlife
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but
not maintain the quality of
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public
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service
,
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people
would
be dissatisfied
. The overloaded medical system is a striking example and it has long been a hot issue as the queuing time at
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public
hospitals is too long while the underprivileged are not able to afford private
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service
. Their rights to receive
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fair
treatment
is deprived
. Citizens would feel that the
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government
has turned a blind eye on their plight and in turn lower their sense of satisfaction to the
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government
.

Never should we overlook that fact that taxpayers give their
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hard
-earned money to the
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government
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but
it is not
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fair
if they cannot enjoy the benefits. The
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government
should place
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citizens'
interest at their
first
priority when they plan for
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resource
allocation. Medical resources, housing and infrastructures
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are


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directly
related to
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citizens'
quality of life, while seeing blue sky and birds are luxury. It is not saying that we shall neglect the importance of protecting nature,
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but
we should
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make
a balance to put
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citizens'
interest at the
first
consideration.

Under this line of thinking, although preserving nature deserve our attention, never should the
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government
overlook that maintaining
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citizens'
quality of life is
also
fulfilling the role of
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government
.
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IELTS essay Many people think that too much attention and resources are given to the protection of wild animals and birds.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
324 words
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