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Change is important in our lives

Change is important in our lives pRaD0
Change is convert from stable case to a new one. A number of people avoid to change, therefor it considered essential for any person. We will be display beneficial and drawbacks sides. In beginning, the most crucial merits of change which it helps numerous people to open their minds to learn new skills, and they should fight their fear to get out from comfort zone, If would do this step, you will change your future. For example, a number of employees do not like their work although they retain it due to they do not like improve their skills or worry leave stable salary. On other contrary, when have been taken decision to change their lives. They find a new job with high salary and deserve a good position. In addition, the demerits of change lead to sometime to collapse due to we will suffer a number of problems as results from this change. For instance, if a person have been alcoholic addicted or smokers for long period, and he wants to quit from them. However, it is not easy although they will suffer from feel desire to come-back. On other hand, we should be careful from give up, and fight it. it is rely persistence as long start it. Depends on your persistence, once your reached, the fatigue will go away In conclusion, the argument whether between two sides want to keep conservative way life or resort to modern life. In my opinion, the change is not easy on the contrary final result deserve to fight which lead to us feel value of life by try a new things and improve our skills.
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new
one. A number of
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people
avoid to
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change
, therefor it considered essential for any person. We will be display beneficial and drawbacks sides.

In beginning, the most crucial merits of
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change
which it
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helps
numerous
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people
to open their minds to learn
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new
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skills
, and they should fight their fear to
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get
out from comfort zone, If would do this step, you will
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change
your future.
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, a number of employees do not like their work although they retain it due to they do not like
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improve
their
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skills
or worry
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leave
stable salary. On other contrary, when have
been taken
decision to
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change
their
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lives
. They find a
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new
job with high salary and deserve a
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good
position.

In addition
, the demerits of
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lead
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collapse due to we will suffer a number of problems as results from this
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change
.
For instance
, if a person have been alcoholic addicted or smokers for long period, and he wants to quit from them.
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come
-back. On other hand, we should be careful from give up, and fight it. it is
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persistence as long
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it. Depends on your persistence, once your reached, the fatigue will go
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In conclusion
, the argument whether between two sides want to
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keep
conservative way life or resort to modern life. In my opinion, the
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change
is not easy
on the contrary
final result deserve to fight which lead to us feel value of life by try a
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new
things and
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IELTS essay Change is important in our lives

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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