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An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their second halves. Do you think that this tendency helps people to socialize or does more harm than good? Give your opinion. Provide relevant examples if necessary.

An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their second halves. Do you think that this tendency helps people to socialize or does more harm than good? Give your opinion. Provide relevant examples if necessary. Nrwn2
Nowadays, dating apps are used more often by many people in search of their soul mates. Overall, In this essay I will share my opinion. When people use online dating websites they approach different cultures and people. In additional, they come to about various traditions and languages. Learning diversity of world always enhance the knowledge of people. Moreover, they explore more in their lives as compare to old people. However, senior citizens did not had any devices to meet the people in seconds, they had to travel place to place to meet and greet people or explore diversity, respectively. Apart from this, socializing also have some disadvantages along the lines, people start pretending to be someone they are not they live in their imaginary world. Importantly, people stopped stepping out of their houses as they have a small world in their mobiles, online or computer. Additionally, various people start having fake friend circle online. As well as, what we see today people face depression, stress and loneliness because of surrounding themselves with fake online friends, those who never there for them. Furthermore, people find relationships online without knowing their background or family and they start dating, Most of the time not only some people do scams but also they do relationships to pass their leisure time. Besides, this people do online dating to refresh there life but end up getting hurt. In conclusion, I believe people should not be desperate to be in relationship as they should wait for the right person. They not suppose to find love on online sites as they are not reliable because any kind of person can appear there without any identification.
Nowadays,
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apps are
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more
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many
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people
in search of their soul mates.
Overall
, In this essay I will share my opinion.

When
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people
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use
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online
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dating
websites they approach
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different
cultures and
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people
. In additional, they
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come
to about various traditions and languages. Learning diversity of world always enhance the knowledge of
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people
.
Moreover
, they explore more in their
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lives
as compare to
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old
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people
.
However
, senior citizens did not
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had
any devices to
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meet
the
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people
in seconds, they had to travel
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place to place to
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meet
and greet
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people
or explore diversity,
respectively
.

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also
have
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some
disadvantages along the lines,
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people
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start
pretending to be someone they are not they
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live
in their imaginary world.
Importantly
,
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people
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stopped
stepping out of their
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houses
as they have a
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small
world in their mobiles,
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online
or computer.
Additionally
, various
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people
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start
having fake friend circle
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online
.
As well
as, what we
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see
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today
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people
face depression,
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stress
and loneliness
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because
of surrounding themselves with fake
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online
friends, those who never there for them.

Furthermore
,
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people
find relationships
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online
without knowing their background or
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family and
they
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start
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, Most of the time not
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only
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people
do scams
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also
they do relationships to pass their leisure time.
Besides
, this
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people
do
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online
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dating
to refresh there life
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but
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end
up getting hurt.

In conclusion
, I believe
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people
should not be desperate to be in relationship as they should wait for the right person. They not suppose to find
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love
on
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online
sites as they are not reliable
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because
any kind of person can appear there without any identification.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their second halves. Do you think that this tendency helps people to socialize or does more harm than good? Give your opinion. Provide relevant examples if necessary.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
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