Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops, and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops, and public transport. NrmDg

It is commonly believed that new technologies have influenced people’s lifestyles, with no exception to smartphones. Opinions widely vary as to whether using mobile phones should be prohibitive in public venues or not. I partially disagree with the mentioned notion on the grounds of several reasons, which will be discussed in this essay. On the one hand, those who are in favor of banning mobile phones claim that this gadget can be intrusive. In the first place, mobile phones can disturb others when they concentrate, for example, in libraries or once people speak loudly in public transportation. Moreover, the mobiles’ signal not only can cause problems for instruments in hospitals, but it is also annoying patients, resulting in deleterious consequences. However, restricting mobile phones in public places nither would be practical nor an ideal course of action. Conversely, mobiles are multi-functional devices, and thus they should not be banned in public places. Firstly, most jobs require their employees to be available throughout the day by phone, especially for emergency situations, like doctors or police officers, meaning that most people should have their phones with them in public places. In the second place, smartphones provide entertainment for people when traveling on a tedious trip by public transportation or even allow them to use their cameras to capture the moments. It goes without saying that using mobiles as a shopping notepad or online payment are other excellent illustrations that justify they should not be restricted. Alternatively, governments can educate people to silence their phones once they are in libraries or hospitals instead of prohibitive rules. In conclusion, I lean toward the idea that although mobile phones would be intrusive in some situations, restricting them seems an unrealistic remedy, and therefore informing people to use them with respect to others in public places would be more beneficial.

It is commonly
 believed that new technologies have influenced You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people’s
 lifestyles, with no exception to smartphones. Opinions widely
 vary Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether", or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to".whether
as to whether
 using mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 should be prohibitive in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
 venues or not. I partially
 disagree with the mentioned notion on the grounds of several reasons, which will be discussed
 in this essay.

On the one hand, those who are in favor of banning mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 claim that this gadget can be intrusive. In the first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodpointhousesitecommunityseat
place
, mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 can disturb others when they concentrate, for example
, in libraries or once You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 speak loudly
 in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
 transportation. Moreover
, the mobiles’ signal not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 can cause problems for instruments in hospitals, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it is also
 annoying patients, resulting in deleterious consequences. However
, restricting mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodpointhousesitecommunityseat
places
Possible spelling mistake found.eitherneitherwitherzitherhithernether
nither
 would be practical nor an ideal course of action.

Conversely
, mobiles are multi-functional devices, and thus
 they should not be banned
 in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodpointhousesitecommunityseat
places
. Firstly
, most jobs require their employees to be available throughout the day by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phone
, especially
 for emergency situations, like doctors or police officers, meaning that most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 should have their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 with them in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodpointhousesitecommunityseat
places
. In the second You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodpointhousesitecommunityseat
place
, smartphones provide entertainment for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 when traveling on a tedious trip by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
 transportation or even This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 them to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 their cameras to capture the moments. It goes without saying that using mobiles as a shopping notepad or online payment are other excellent illustrations that justify they should not be restricted
. Alternatively
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
 can educate You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 to silence their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 once they are in libraries or hospitals instead
 of prohibitive This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
.

In conclusion
, I lean toward the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 that although mobile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdialcontactcall up
phones
 would be intrusive in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 situations, restricting them seems an unrealistic remedy, and therefore
 informing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 them with respect to others in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneighborhoodpointhousesitecommunityseat
places
 would be more beneficial. 