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Many people think that advertising is annoying or amusing and they are not influenced by it when they decide to buy something. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Many people think that advertising is annoying or amusing and they are not influenced by it when they decide to buy something. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? DYM5E
Advertisement is everywhere and it has a great impact on everyone’s life, even though some people deny it and think that they are disturbing in a day-to-day life. . Although there can be some demerits to this trend, in my opinion, these are eclipsed by the merits. Relevant points to justify my opinion will be discussed in the following essay. To commence with, various negative consequence can be considered when ads are played everywhere and on every product. Firstly, it creates an unnecessary need. Most ads out there push products that very few people actually need. For instance, advertisement on jewelry, costly gadgets like iPhone and junk food which could literally make people crave something they did not even know they wanted a few seconds earlier. Secondly cluttering individual’s life with endless messaging. The outdoor campaign where we bombard with a lot of message and calls from sales persons about their products. When it comes to online advertisement, whenever we search for some product in online websites such as Amazon, Flipkart then the recommendations of the product will follow u in form of pop up ads which ruin any kind of website experience, often slowing the site down to feed you with ads that you don’t want to see and making it hard to close them Despite the above mentioned constraints, many more positives can be observed. To begin with advertising is an incredibly effective and powerful way to spread a word about important issues and products such as tobacco and alcohol risks, diabetes monitors and other health related concerns. Moreover, the free search that we do today in Google has become free, because of online advertising. Furthermore, advertisement helps in keeping the price competitive for customers. For example when a business like GIO network introduced unlimited calling plan for their customers, then others all took notice and had to drop their prices. To conclude, the above discussion makes it evident that though the negative elements of advertisements cannot be ignored, these are overshadowed by the constructive outcomes
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even though
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some
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people
deny it and
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think
that they are disturbing in a day-to-day life.
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.
Although there can be
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some
demerits to this trend, in my opinion, these
are eclipsed
by the merits. Relevant points to justify my opinion will
be discussed
in the following essay.

To commence with, various
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negative
consequence can
be considered
when ads
are played
everywhere and on every
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product
.
Firstly
, it creates an unnecessary need. Most ads out there push
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products
that
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very
few
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people
actually need.
For instance
,
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advertisement
on jewelry, costly gadgets like iPhone and junk food which could
literally
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make
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people
crave something they did not even
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know
they wanted a few seconds earlier.
Secondly
cluttering individual’s life with endless messaging. The outdoor campaign where we bombard with
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a lot of message
and calls from sales persons about their
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products
. When it
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comes
to online
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advertisement
, whenever we search for
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some
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product
in online websites such as Amazon, Flipkart then the recommendations of the
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product
will follow u in form of pop up ads which ruin any kind of website experience,
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often
slowing the site down to feed you with ads that you don’t want to
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see
and making it
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hard
to close
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Despite the above mentioned constraints,
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more positives can
be observed
. To
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begin
with advertising is an
incredibly
effective and powerful way to spread a word about
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important
issues and
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products
such as tobacco and alcohol
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risks
, diabetes monitors and other health related concerns.

Moreover
, the free search that we do
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today
in Google has become free,
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because
of online advertising.
Furthermore
,
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advertisement
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helps
in keeping the price competitive for customers.
For example
when a business like
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GIO
network introduced unlimited calling plan for their customers, then others all took notice and had to drop their prices.

To conclude
, the above discussion
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makes
it evident that though the
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negative
elements of
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advertisements
cannot be
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ignored
, these
are overshadowed
by the constructive outcomes
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IELTS essay Many people think that advertising is annoying or amusing and they are not influenced by it when they decide to buy something. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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337 words
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