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Please tell us about your biggest failure in the past and how you overcame it

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I’ve just gone through the national high school graduation exam and I didn’t pass my first university aspiration which is a public school that has a cheap tuition fee. While I got a notification from that school, I was so disappointed and didn’t stop blaming myself for the result. Stress, upset and I had to endure a lot of prejudices from people surrounding me. They labeled me that I was a student in High school for the Gifted but not passed any public school. I knew that made my parents dismayed but I didn’t know how to overcome it. Randomly, I knew the other private school (I will call A University) was celebrating a scholarship contest and I applied my profile and joined that contest. One week later, I got an announcement that I gained the scholarship, at that time I was surprised and proud of myself because I couldn’t believe that I can do it. And I determined to choose that university. It was not until I selected A university that my neighbors started talking about my choice. They labeled me again that I was a student in a top high school in the province but then I choose a private university. I was confused and wondered that why these people didn’t care about my feelings and what I was thinking although I tried my best to gain that achievement. But this time is different, I told myself to ignore what those people say and motivate my mind to try and get harder to prove that what I chose is right.
I’ve
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aspiration which is a public
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that has a
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tuition fee. While I
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a notification from that
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, I was
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disappointed and didn’t
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stop
blaming myself for the result.
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a lot of
prejudices from
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surrounding me. They labeled me that I was a student in High
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school
for the Gifted
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not passed any public
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school
. I knew that made my parents dismayed
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I didn’t know how to overcome it.
Randomly
, I knew the other private
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school
(I will call A
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University)
was celebrating a scholarship contest and I applied my profile and
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joined
that contest. One week later, I
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got
an announcement that I gained the scholarship, at that time I
was surprised
and proud of myself
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. It was not until I selected A
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that my neighbors
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started
talking about my choice. They labeled me again that I was a student in a top high
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school
in the province
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but
then I choose a private
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university
. I
was confused
and wondered that why these
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people
didn’t care about my feelings and what I was thinking although I tried my best to gain that achievement.
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But
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ignore
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say and motivate my mind to
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harder to prove that what I chose is right.
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IELTS essay Please tell us about your biggest failure in the past and how you overcame it

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262 words
6.0
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