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Crime is wrong. should government spend more on jail or not?

Crime is wrong. should government spend more on jail or not? VyKWO
Crime is an issue of increasing concern around the world, and more money than ever before is being spent on the detection and punishment of criminal activity. The reasons why people commit crime are countless, but drugs and alcohol, social problems and poverty play a major role. To solve these problems, governments can either focus on draconian punishments, or improve employment opportunities, invest in good housing projects and tackle drug and alcohol abuse. One of the main causes of criminality is the use, sale and trafficking of narcotics. For example, the sale of drugs is organised by armed criminal gangs who illegally traffick drugs and control their business with extreme violence. Drug-related crime does not end there, drug users often steal to fund their habit, resulting in further acts of petty crime. The social problems connecțed with crime are said to be the result of single-parent families, absent role models and bad living conditions. The children from these broken families often become criminals because they feel alienated from society. Poverty is also a reason behind crime. When unskilled jobs pay so little and prices are so high, it's easy to see why some turn to crime for an income. Crime can of, course, be dealt with by toughening criminal laws and introducing longer custodial sentences for persistent criminals, but some of the best ways to deal with crime may be to deal with the social causes. Increasing employment opportunities in poorer areas would improve living standards, which would mean access to affordable housing and education. Government funding for drug and alcohol rehabilitation programmes would help reduce dependency on stimulants and the need for the criminal activicy that surrounds them. In conclusion, crime is a major issue, but cracking down on offenders with a harsh penal system is not the only way. These problems can be solved through the ail government providing jobs and funding which should raise living standards and dramatically reduce crime levels.
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Crime
is an issue of increasing concern around the world,

and more money than ever
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before
is
being spent
on

the detection and punishment of
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criminal
activity. The

reasons why
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people
commit
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crime
are countless,
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drugs and alcohol, social
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problems
and poverty play a

major role. To solve these
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problems
,
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governments
can

either focus on
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draconian
punishments, or
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improve


employment opportunities, invest in
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good
housing

projects and tackle
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drug
and alcohol abuse.

One of the main causes of criminality is the
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use
, sale and

trafficking of narcotics.
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, the sale of
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drugs
is

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organised
by armed
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gangs who
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drugs and control their business with extreme violence.

Drug-related
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does not
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there,
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drug
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steal to fund their habit, resulting in
further
acts of petty

crime. The social
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connecțed
with
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crime
are said
to be the result of single-parent families, absent role

models and
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bad
living conditions. The children from

these broken families
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often
become
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criminals
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they feel alienated from society. Poverty is
also
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behind
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crime
. When unskilled jobs pay
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little
and prices

are
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high, it's easy to
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why
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turn to
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for an

income.

Crime can of, course,
be dealt
with by toughening

criminal laws and introducing longer custodial sentences

for persistent
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,
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some
of the best ways to

deal with
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crime
may be to deal with the social causes.

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would
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living standards, which would mean

access to affordable housing and education.
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funding for
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drug
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dependency on stimulants and the

need for the
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activicy
that surrounds them.

In conclusion
,
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crime
is a major issue,
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cracking

down on offenders with a harsh penal system is not the

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only
way. These
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can
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through the

ail

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government
providing jobs and funding which should

raise living standards and
dramatically
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reduce
crime

levels.
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IELTS essay Crime is wrong. should government spend more on jail or not?

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7 paragraphs
324 words
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