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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both view, and give your own opinion.

Tertiary education is essential for achieving success in life. Students, who get high band scores, usually get a chance to admit in universities, though older students and having a low-mark in school life should also be gotten excess into the higher education. From my perspective, all types of students both youngest with high-mark and adult students with low-grade must have a right to earn knowledge from universities. On the one hand, pupils who earn standard marks in all his academic life, easily get admission at university. The reason is that professors at tertiaries think that since the student has achieved the highest position at school, he must have worked hard. Eventually, he will do a better result in higher studies, and cope with the workload and activities-related universities and its teachers. For example, in school, the top-rated students are disciplined and efficient so that they do their tasks efficiently and listen what their teachers are focusing on. Therefore, the dean of tertiary education selects those brilliant students who could do excellent results. Consequently, this selection generates a higher level of citizens, and socioeconomic will be strong for these intellectuals. On the other hand, each student has the right to study at the university level. It is justifiable to say that if all students get a higher education, any nation will develop immediately. For that reason, universities should give chance to age-students as well as pupils who obtain the lowest marks at school due to the advancement of a country. For instance, in the USA, the renowned universities such as Harvard or Yale - provide their admission form for all types of students, but they should have a quality which could be anything whether skilled at sports, art or higher marks gained in the school certificate. As a result, no one is unemployed when university graduates get their certificate from tertiary education. In conclusion, it is a controversial issue about whether universities should focus on selecting the top-rated students from intermediate level, or, whether they should select senior learners who did not cut a good figure on the previous exam. In my opinion, both types of students must be selected by the university for the socioeconomic growth of society.
Tertiary
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education
is essential for achieving success in life.
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Students
,
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who
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get
high band scores,
usually
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get
a chance to admit in
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universities
, though older
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students
and having a low-mark in
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school
life should
also
be gotten
excess into the higher
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education
. From my perspective, all types of
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students
both youngest with high-mark and adult
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students
with low-grade
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must
have a right to earn knowledge from universities.

On the one hand, pupils
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who
earn standard marks in all his academic life,
easily
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get
admission at
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university
. The reason is that professors at
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tertiaries
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think
that since the
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student
has achieved the highest position at
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school
, he
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must
have worked
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hard
.
Eventually
, he will do a better result in higher studies, and cope with the workload and activities-related
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universities
and its teachers.
For example
, in
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school
, the top-rated
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students
are disciplined
and efficient
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so
that they do their tasks
efficiently
and listen what their teachers are focusing on.
Therefore
, the dean of tertiary
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education
selects those brilliant
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students
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who
could do excellent results.
Consequently
, this selection generates a higher level of citizens, and socioeconomic will be strong for these intellectuals.

On the other hand
, each
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student
has the right to study at the
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university
level. It is justifiable to say that if all
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students
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get
a higher
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education
, any nation will develop immediately. For that reason,
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universities
should give chance to age-students
as well
as pupils
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who
obtain the lowest marks at
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school
due to the advancement of a country.
For instance
, in the USA, the renowned
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universities
such as Harvard or Yale
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-
provide their admission form for all types of
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students
,
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but
they should have a quality which could be anything whether skilled at sports, art or higher marks gained in the
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school
certificate.
As a result
, no one
is unemployed
when
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university
graduates
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get
their certificate from tertiary education.

In conclusion
, it is a controversial issue about whether
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universities
should focus on selecting the top-rated
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students
from intermediate level, or, whether they should select senior learners
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who
did not
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cut
a
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good
figure on the previous exam. In my opinion, both types of
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be selected
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
for the socioeconomic growth of society.

IELTS essay Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school.

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