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Task 2 It has been a common phenomenon between individuals that there is no purpose for zoos in the current scenario and they should be shut down.

Task 2 It has been a common phenomenon between individuals that there is no purpose for zoos in the current scenario and they should be shut down. I agree with this statement because zoos have been resulted into places where animals are kept in a closed area for the entertainment of human beings. The problem with respect to zoos are, that the animals are captured by hunters when they are infants and they never expose them to wildlife. The main issue here is, when a particular species of animal or bird is not useful to the zoo they are sent back to the jungle and survival becomes almost impossible for them. For example if a tiger who is has attained adulthood in the zoo is sent back to the jungle it becomes very tough for the animal to hunt for food as there was ample food being provided back then in the zoo. The tiger has never been able to develop his hunting skills and this leads to the animal dying of starvation when left alone to survive. The solution for zoos would be wild life sanctuaries where the wild animals can live without being subject to living in a prison kind of an environment. There would be abundance of food and as the wild animal has been staying in the forest right from the moment they are born, they automatically are equipped with appropriate hunting skills. People can also benefit through this. For example, the Sanjay Gandhi National Park is a wild life sanctuary which has been home to numerous species. It also has accommodation facilities for tourist where they can live in the forest as a part of an enthralling experience. It can be concluded that, humans cannot survive in the forest it goes vice versa for the animals as well. Sanctuaries would be the best option if the zoos are shut because, there would be no harm to the environment and it would also help humans to learn about animals when they are kept in the wild itself.
Task 2

It has been a common phenomenon between individuals that there is no purpose for zoos in the
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current
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scenario and
they should
be shut
down. I
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agree
with this statement
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because
zoos have
been resulted
into places where
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animals
are
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kept
in a closed area for the entertainment of human beings.

The problem with respect to zoos are, that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
are captured
by hunters when they are
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
infants and
they never expose them to wildlife. The main issue here is, when a particular species of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
or bird is not useful to the zoo they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
back to the jungle and survival becomes almost impossible for them.
For example
if a tiger who is has attained adulthood in the zoo is
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sent
back to the jungle it becomes
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very
tough for the
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animal
to hunt for food as there was ample food
being provided
back then in the zoo. The tiger has never been able to develop his hunting
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skills
and this leads to the
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animal
dying of starvation when
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left
alone to survive.

The solution for zoos would be wild life sanctuaries where the wild
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animals
can
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live
without being subject to living in a prison
If ‘kind’ is a classification term, ‘an’ is not necessary. Use “kind of”. (The phrases ‘kind of’ and ‘sort of’ are informal if they mean ‘to some extent’.)
kind of an
environment. There would be abundance of food and as the wild
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animal
has been staying in the forest right from the moment they
are born
, they
automatically
are equipped
with appropriate hunting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
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People
can
also
benefit through this.
For example
, the Sanjay Gandhi National Park is a wild life sanctuary which has been home to numerous species. It
also
has accommodation facilities for tourist where they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the forest as a part of an enthralling experience.

It can
be concluded
that, humans cannot survive in the forest it goes vice versa for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
as well
. Sanctuaries would be the best option if the zoos
are shut
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
, there would be no harm to the
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
environment and
it would
also
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help
humans to learn about
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animals
when they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in the wild itself.
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IELTS essay Task 2 It has been a common phenomenon between individuals that there is no purpose for zoos in the current scenario and they should be shut down.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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