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Many people regard film as less important art forms than literature and paintings To what extent do you agree o disagree v.1

Many people regard film as less important art forms than literature and paintings 1
Due to modern technology and to innovation, money was replaced from cash to cashless. Many people believe that, credit and debit cards are beneficial to them, while, other commenters affirmed that it is not beneficial, rather it can cause numerous disadvantages. The writer, will discuss the disadvantages and disadvantages below, followed by a concrete conclusion. To start with, we cannot deny that in this modern era, more and more people prefer to use credit and debit cards due to numerous benefits. One of the advantages, is that there is no need to carry the bulk of money for shopping in the malls or stores. For instance, a fluent shopper went to purchase an item in the shopping centre used her debit card for payment and in just a few minutes she paid the bill with no issues. Apart from that, it can be utilized for purchasing any products, Tru online which is widely popular in this fast paced world. Thus, it is more convenient and hassle free. On the other hand, there are also benefits of using plastic money than cards, because there are some drawbacks of utilizing cards. One disadvantage, is that few people nowadays know how to hack and clown the cards, there is a huge tendency that the hacker will transfer the money to their account and can be utilized in criminal activities, like buying paying their bills. Hence, it leads to financial problems. There are numerous individuals filed a complaint to the police stations about these matters. For instance, One of the managers of Kodak company, lost her money in just a few days, because someone hacked her account and lead her to financial constraint and problem too. To sum up, due to widely popular nowadays, we cannot deny that there are a few pitfalls that can be encountered, but, there are some measures to curb the negative issues. I opine that, people who are utilizing the debit and credit cards should be cautious and be vigilant.
Due to modern technology and to innovation,
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money
was replaced
from cash to cashless.
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Many
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people
believe that, credit and debit
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cards
are beneficial to them, while, other
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commenters
affirmed that it is not beneficial,
rather
it can cause numerous disadvantages. The writer, will discuss the disadvantages and disadvantages below, followed by a concrete conclusion.

To
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start
with, we cannot deny that in this modern era, more and more
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people
prefer to
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use
credit and debit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cards
due to numerous benefits. One of the advantages, is that there is no need to carry the bulk of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
for shopping in the malls or stores.
For instance
, a fluent shopper went to
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purchase
an item in the shopping
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centre
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used
her debit
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card
for payment and in
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just
a few minutes she paid the bill with no issues. Apart from that, it can
be utilized
for purchasing any products,
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Tru
online which is
widely
popular in this
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fast
paced world.
Thus
, it is more convenient and hassle free.

On the other hand
, there are
also
benefits of using plastic
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money
than
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cards
,
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because
there are
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some
drawbacks of utilizing
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cards
. One
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disadvantage
, is that few
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people
nowadays know how to hack and clown the
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cards
, there is a huge tendency that the hacker will transfer the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
to their account and can
be utilized
in criminal activities, like buying paying their bills.
Hence
, it leads to financial problems. There are numerous individuals filed a complaint to the police stations about these matters.
For instance
, One of the managers of Kodak
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company
, lost her
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money
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
a few days,
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because
someone hacked her account and lead her to financial constraint and problem too.

To sum up, due to
widely
popular nowadays, we cannot deny that there are a few pitfalls that can
be encountered
,
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but
, there are
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some
measures to curb the
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negative
issues. I opine that,
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people
who are utilizing the debit and credit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cards
should be cautious and be vigilant.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people regard film as less important art forms than literature and paintings 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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