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Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? v.5

Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? v. 5
Film industry flourished dramatically over the last few years. Technological advancements have made a big contribution to the success of this industry. Countries such as India, USA etc. are highly dependent on this industry. Their governments are financially supporting to achieve better and long lasting result. They are in the process of sticking people to watch their own locally produced movies. However, with the easy access to foreign movies and because of low-quality local movies people nowadays prefer watching foreign movies more often. This has become a global phenomenon and both movie viewers and the government should patronise the growth of local movies according to many. There are several reasons for the shift in term of watching movies. Nowadays, people are smarter; they do not want to waste their time and money for an ordinary movie. They want quality movies, which have big casts, good camera works, emotions and suspense. In addition to this, they want something new and unique. This is why they are pursuing towards foreign films. Lack of funds is one of the vital reasons in competing with other movie industries. People are reluctant to work in local films because they have been paid very less. These people try to find their career in other countries because of high income and appreciation. The government should support their local film industry in order to equip with the latest technology such as cameras, software and training. The good work of celebrities should be acknowledged and awarded by the government, this will encourage good people to join and serve for this industry. The government should also restrict the piracy of movies and promote the local movies to help flourish the local movies. In conclusion, I would say that with mutual support of government and people will definitely help local film industry to grow immensely. This will later turn into a fruitful tree for our economy.
Film
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industry
flourished
dramatically
over the last few years. Technological advancements have made a
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big
contribution to the success of this
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industry
. Countries such as India, USA etc. are
highly
dependent on this
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industry
. Their
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governments
are
financially
supporting to achieve better and
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long lasting
result. They are in the process of sticking
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people
to
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watch
their
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own
locally
produced
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movies
.
However
, with the easy access to foreign
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movies
and
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because
of low-quality
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local
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movies
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people
nowadays prefer watching foreign
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movies
more
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often
. This has become a global phenomenon and both
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movie
viewers and the
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government
should
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patronise
the growth of
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local
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movies
according to
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many
.

There are several reasons for the shift in term of watching
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movies
. Nowadays,
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people
are smarter; they do not want to waste their time and money for an ordinary
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movie
. They want quality
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movies
, which have
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big
casts,
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good
camera works, emotions and suspense.
In addition
to this, they want something new and unique. This is why they are pursuing towards foreign films.

Lack of funds is one of the vital reasons in competing with other
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movie
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industries
.
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People
are reluctant to work in
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local
films
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because
they have
been paid
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very
less. These
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people
try to find their career in other countries
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because
of high income and appreciation. The
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government
should support their
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local
film
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industry
in order to equip with the latest technology such as cameras, software and training. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
work of celebrities should
be acknowledged
and awarded by the
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government
, this will encourage
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good
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people
to
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join
and serve for this
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industry
.
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The
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government
should
also
restrict the piracy of
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movies
and promote the
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local
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movies
to
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help
flourish the
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local
movies.

In conclusion
, I would say that with mutual support of
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government
and
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people
will definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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local
film
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industry
to grow
immensely
. This will later turn into a fruitful tree for our economy.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
5.5
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