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Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? v.2

Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? v. 2
It is a fact that in many countries, people prefer to watch foreign films rather than the local ones. There are various reasons that have caused the situation and the following essay will discuss them and how governments should react in details. For a number of reasons, a lot of people prefer to watch foreign movies than the locally produced ones. Firstly, they believe that overseas films have higher quality in terms of visual effects and audio. For instances, films such as Batman or Spiderman had been watched by people all over the world, due to their sophisticated digital effects. Secondly, many people choose to watch foreign films due to the poor quality of the local actors and actresses. They think that these local artists could not play their role in the maximum capacity which negatively impacts on the films' quality. There are some things that governments should do in order to improve the quality of the local film. Governments could give some scholarships for their best actors and actresses to study further about acting in foreign countries. And then, governments could play their role as a mediator between the local and overseas producers. They could cooperate in producing films, therefore local producers could learn how to generate high-quality films. It is believed that these things would give positive effects to the local film industry. In conclusion, instead of watching local films, many people choose to watch overseas ones. They believe that overseas films are better than local ones in all aspects. Governments should respond to the condition by sending their best actors and actresses to study acting overseas and by cooperating with foreign film producers. By doing these kinds of things it is hoped there will be improvements for local film industries.
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rather
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. There are various reasons that have caused the situation and the following essay will discuss them and how
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governments
should react in
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details
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For a number of reasons,
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people
prefer to
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watch
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foreign
movies than the
locally
produced
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.
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, they believe that
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films have higher quality in terms of visual effects and audio. For instances, films such as Batman or
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all over the world, due to their sophisticated digital effects.
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foreign
films due to the poor quality of the
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actors and actresses. They
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artists could not play their role in the maximum capacity which
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There are
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things that
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governments
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could give
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some
scholarships for their best actors and actresses to study
further
about acting in
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foreign
countries. And then,
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governments
could play their role as a mediator between the
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local
and
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overseas
producers. They could cooperate in producing films,
therefore
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local
producers could learn how to generate high-quality films. It
is believed
that these things would give
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positive
effects to the
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local
film industry.

In conclusion
,
instead
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local
films,
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people
choose to
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overseas
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ones
. They believe that
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overseas
films are better than
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local
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ones
in all aspects.
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Governments
should respond to the condition by sending their best actors and actresses to study acting
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overseas
and by cooperating with
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foreign
film producers. By doing these kinds of things it
is hoped
there will be improvements for
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local
film industries.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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