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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? er77
People living in modern-day megacities face many problems every day. Firstly, the daily commute to work is a nightmare for most. This is because many offices in large cities are located in a central business district; usually the most expensive region of the city. Meanwhile, most workers live in faraway suburbs where they can afford a decent-size dwelling. As a result, employees can end up spending as much as 2 hours traveling back and forth between their homes and offices every day, mostly stuck in traffic. Secondly, the congestion from millions of vehicles in the big cities causes severe pollution especially during winter months when most large cities are blanketed in thick smog. Pollution levels in cities like New Delhi and Beijing were so high last year that the local governments had to impose restrictions on the number of vehicles running on the road, leading to even more disruption in the day-to-day lives of the office-going residents. Owing to these problems, some people have suggested that governments should motivate people to move to remote areas. I agree with this solution primarily because it solves the main issues faced by megacities. Authorities ought to introduce incentives for companies to shift their offices to regional towns. If companies relocate to these remote areas, they will no longer need to rent offices inexpensive real estate and will be able to hire local talent. This will have a knock-on effect on other services too. For instance, once offices start cropping up in regional areas, cafes, pubs, schools, and hospitals will follow too. Furthermore, as regional towns are much smaller, people will be able to live closer to their workplace, thus improving their overall quality of life. I still fondly remember the days when I used to work in a small regional town with a population of just 100, 000. My workplace was so close to my apartment that I used to come home to have lunch every day. In conclusion, everyday problems in large cities vary from long commute times to unhealthy levels of pollution. I agree that authorities should encourage people to move to regional towns to alleviate this issue.
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problems every day.
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because
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many
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offices
in large
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cities
are located
in a central business district;
usually
the most expensive region of the city. Meanwhile, most workers
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live
in faraway suburbs where they can afford a decent-size dwelling.
As a result
, employees can
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end
up spending as much as 2 hours traveling back and forth between their homes and
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offices
every day,
mostly
stuck in traffic.
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, the congestion from millions of vehicles in the
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big
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cities
causes severe pollution
especially
during winter months when most large
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cities
are blanketed
in thick smog. Pollution levels in
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cities
like New Delhi and Beijing were
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so
high last year that the local
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governments
had to impose restrictions on the number of vehicles running on the road, leading to even more disruption in the day-to-day
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lives
of the office-going residents.

Owing to these problems,
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some
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people
have suggested that
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governments
should motivate
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people
to
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move
to remote areas. I
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agree
with this solution
primarily
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because
it solves the main issues faced by
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megacities
. Authorities ought to introduce incentives for
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companies
to shift their
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offices
to
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regional
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towns
. If
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companies
relocate to these remote areas, they will no longer need to rent
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offices
inexpensive real estate and will be able to hire local talent. This will have a knock-on effect on other services too.
For instance
, once
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offices
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start
cropping up in
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regional
areas,
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cafes
, pubs, schools, and hospitals will follow too.
Furthermore
, as
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regional
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towns
are much smaller,
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people
will be able to
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live
closer to their workplace,
thus
improving their
overall
quality of life. I
still
fondly
remember the days when I
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used
to work in a
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small
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regional
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town
with a population of
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just
100, 000. My workplace was
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so
close to my apartment that I
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used
to
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come
home to have lunch every day.

In conclusion
, everyday problems in large
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cities
vary from long commute times to unhealthy levels of pollution. I
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agree
that authorities should encourage
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people
to
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move
to
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regional
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towns
to alleviate this issue.
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IELTS essay People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

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357 words
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