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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Aqle
I think it is beneficial that goods like food, cars, furniture and clothes that are produced in a certain part of the world are now available almost everywhere, which means the similarities between various countries are growing. (37 words) People in different regions now have access to products they could not use before. There are numerous goods that are produced only in certain parts of the world, which means that people living in other places could not normally take advantage of them in the past. For example, bananas and pineapples are grown in tropical countries and so, did not use to be available to consumers in colder countries like Russia and Canada. Nevertheless, most people in such countries are now able to buy and eat these beneficial fruits. (89 words) Furthermore, people can now migrate to different countries with less fear of becoming homesick since the products they are used to are now available in shops wherever they go. For instance, Iranian immigrants could not cook their national dish, Ghormesabzi, in other parts of the globe because the specific vegetables required were not grown there. However, as they can access all these ingredients in shops and supermarkets around the world today, they do not miss a significant part of their cultural heritage anymore, allowing them to work and live more productively. (91 words) Some may argue that the global spread of similar goods and the growing similarity between countries can reduce people’s motivation to travel to other parts of the world, decreasing tourism and the revenue it brings to countries. But I think people will still travel to see and experience the natural features of other countries like forests, mountains and wildlife. (59 words) In conclusion, I believe the growing similarity between countries around the world is a desirable development. People can now take advantage of beneficial goods from other countries, and immigrants can be less stressed and more productive
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in a certain
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part
of the world are
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available almost everywhere, which means the

similarities between various
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countries
are growing. (37 words)

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different
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have access to products they could not
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before
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are numerous
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that
are produced
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in certain
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parts
of the world, which means

that
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people
living in other places could not
normally
take advantage of them in the past.

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, bananas and pineapples
are grown
in tropical
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countries
and
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, did not
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use to
be available to consumers in colder
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countries
like Russia and Canada.
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,

most
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now
able to
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and eat these beneficial fruits. (89 words)

Furthermore
,
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people
can
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now
migrate to
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countries
with less fear of becoming

homesick since the products they are
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used
to are
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available in shops wherever they

go.
For instance
, Iranian immigrants could not cook their national dish,
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Ghormesabzi
, in

other
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parts
of the globe
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because
the specific vegetables required were not grown there.

However
, as they can access all these ingredients in shops and supermarkets around the

world
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today
, they do not miss a significant
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part
of their cultural heritage anymore,

allowing them to work and
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live
more
productively
. (91 words)

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Some
may argue that the global spread of similar
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goods
and the growing similarity

between
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countries
can
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reduce
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people’s
motivation to travel to other
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parts
of the world,

decreasing tourism and the revenue it brings to
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countries
.
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travel to
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see
and experience the natural features of other
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countries
like forests,

mountains and wildlife. (59 words)

In conclusion
, I believe the growing similarity between
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countries
around the world is a

desirable development.
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People
can
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now
take advantage of beneficial
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goods
from other

countries, and immigrants can be less
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stressed
and more
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productive
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IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
319 words
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