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Many people now a days tend to marry and have children in their late thirties rather than at a younger age. Is this a positive or negative development?

Many people now a days tend to marry and have children in their late thirties rather than at a younger age. Is this a positive or negative development? WbKe
In the present era it is quite trendy to get married in the spring time of life however the babies are planned in the maturity adulthood. I strongly believe it to be a useful enlargement. This essay will discuss how this trend leads to a good parenting as well as broaden the vision of the youth towards the children and their future. To start with, this fashion helps the couple to become the idle parents that they can't be at the age of twenty or the early youth. The maturity at the age of thirty makes them experienced and confident enough to take the responsibilities of a child. To illustrate, a recent survey get it to be crystal cleared by showing the idle parents bar graph where 80 percent parents are those who planned their family at the maturity adulthood. Secondly, the married couple get a sufficient time to look forward and make a clear vision regarding their life style, members of the family, number of children and the way how they would grow up. This clear and broader vision adds another beneficial factor to our growth. For instance, in outer countries the parents take time to get a baby born and just because of that they have adequate duration to observe and think around. Alternatively, not only the couple but the baby also would be benefitted in the form of a bright and set future. It is because of their pre-planning and clear observations regarding parenting. To conclude, I strongly recommend to think about having a baby after a few years of marriage approximately in between 30-40 years of age. Don't think about a kid untill you aren't experienced enough to do parenting in an idle way. Not only this but your vast sense to plan and execute the things also matters a lot that can be achieved at the maturity level only.
In the present era it is quite trendy to
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married in the spring time of life
however
the
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babies
are planned
in the
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maturity
adulthood. I
strongly
believe it to be a useful enlargement. This essay will discuss how this trend leads to a
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good
parenting
as well
as broaden the vision of the youth towards the children and their future.

To
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start
with, this fashion
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helps
the couple to become the idle
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parents
that they can't be at the age of twenty or the early youth. The
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maturity
at the age of thirty
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makes
them experienced and confident
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enough
to take the responsibilities of a child. To illustrate, a recent survey
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get
it to be crystal cleared by showing the idle
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parents
bar graph where 80 percent
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parents
are those who planned their family at the
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maturity
adulthood.

Secondly
, the married couple
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get
a sufficient time to look forward and
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make
a
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clear
vision regarding their life style, members of the family, number of children and the way how they would grow up. This
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clear
and broader vision
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adds
another beneficial factor to our growth.
For instance
, in outer countries the
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parents
take time to
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get
a baby born and
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just
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because
of that they have adequate duration to observe and
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think
around.
Alternatively
, not
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only
the couple
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but
the baby
also
would be
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benefitted
in the form of a bright and set future. It is
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because
of their
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pre-planning
and
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clear
observations regarding parenting.

To conclude
, I
strongly
recommend to
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think
about having a baby after a few years of marriage approximately in between 30-40 years of age. Don't
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think
about a kid
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untill
you aren't experienced
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enough
to
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do parenting
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in an idle way
. Not
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only
this
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but
your vast sense to plan and execute the things
also
matters a lot that can
be achieved
at the
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maturity
level
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only
.

IELTS essay Many people now a days tend to marry and have children in their late thirties rather than at a younger age. Is this a positive or negative development?

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314 words
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