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Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. v.3

Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. v. 3
Distance learning, a modern phenomenon, has become widely popular, especially after the invention of the internet. In the pre-internet era, it was confined to posts and TV and could attract a nominal number of leaners. Despite a boom in home-based learning trend due to the technological advancements, it is not as much beneficial as attending a formal educational institute, as far as I am concerned. To begin with, university education is not restricted to some textbook lessons as it also focuses on creating an enlightened generation through a favourable environment where students learn to interact with each other, discover the diversity of cultures, and learn to face real-life challenges. Some video scripts and printed documents cannot teach them how to use those in the practical world. For instance, someone who learns a skill online finds it difficult to implement it in the real world. Thus their poor performance in professional life is imminent. Moreover, instructors have extensive experience in dealing with students from different backgrounds and modify their lessons according to the capacity of the students. This is completely missing in the distance learning method and thus the single-package-fits-all model is less productive. Taking an online course to learn to play the guitar could be a classic example. A recent study by the University of Sussex reveals that nine out of ten online guitar learners fail to master it due to the lack of motivation and this is where the formal education comes in - motivating students. Taking distance learning courses for learning a programming language, or how to cook a cuisine can be useful for many but this can never be the alternatives to education we receive from colleges and universities. To conclude, we attend educational institutes to learn and become enlightened citizens, not to memorise lessons and pass exams. While distance learning can be a bonus to our already enlightened mind, it can never be the same as studying at a college or university.
Distance
learning
, a modern phenomenon, has become
widely
popular,
especially
after the invention of the internet. In the
pre-internet
era, it
was confined
to posts and TV and could attract a nominal number of
leaners
. Despite a boom in home-based
learning
trend due to the technological advancements, it is not as much beneficial as attending a formal educational institute, as far as I
am concerned
.

To
begin
with, university education is not restricted to
some
textbook lessons as it
also
focuses on creating an enlightened generation through a
favourable
environment where
students
learn
to interact with each other, discover the diversity of cultures, and
learn
to face real-life challenges.
Some
video scripts and printed documents cannot teach them how to
use
those in the practical world.
For instance
, someone who
learns
a
skill
online finds it difficult to implement it in the real world.
Thus
their poor performance in professional life is imminent.

Moreover
, instructors have extensive experience in dealing with
students
from
different
backgrounds and modify their lessons according to the capacity of the
students
. This is completely missing in the
distance
learning
method and
thus
the single-package-fits-all model is less productive. Taking an online course to
learn
to play the guitar could be a classic example. A recent study by the University of Sussex reveals that nine out of ten online guitar learners fail to master it due to the lack of motivation and this is where the formal education
comes
in
-
motivating
students
. Taking
distance
learning
courses for
learning
a programming language, or how to cook a cuisine can be useful for
many
but
this can never be the alternatives to education we receive from colleges and universities.

To conclude
, we attend educational institutes to
learn
and become enlightened citizens, not to
memorise
lessons and pass exams. While
distance
learning
can be a bonus to our already enlightened mind, it can never be the same as studying at a college or university.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. v. 3

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