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Many people have problems managing their money. What skills does a person need to manage their money well? Who should teach children these skills?

Many people have problems managing their money. What skills does a person need to manage their money well? Who should teach children these skills? EJ63
Today managing of money is one of the essential problems for people. This essay will explain which type of capability people need to run their cash and who ought to educate the young for this. Firstly, everyone need to be patient, thrifty for managing their money. When people get a salary at the end of a month, they need start to calculate their necessary requirement for a next month. Some people obtain currency, they do not consider they have to live with this money for a long time that is why, they go to a restuarant or a bar and squander most part of money. As a result, after a certain period of time they realize that there is not any money for meeting the daily necessity. But for instance, if they determine everything they can need such food shopping, garment shopping and so on, they will not suffer from this issue. In my personal opinion, parents should teach this type of things to their children. As we know, they give a certain amount of money to children to satisfy their necessity at school. While some parents give all money at the beginning of a week, others give sufficent quantity for a day. And when children who get whole money in a day spend all of them, next day their parent give to them money again but they should not. For example, if they know that they have to maintain this money for a week and nobody give antything to them, they will be have reponsible and start to seperate a certain amount money for a day. In conclusion, people have to plan everythin they can need in a month when they get money and parents are liable person for teaching to their children.
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managing of
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money
is one of the essential problems for
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people
. This essay will
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which type of capability
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people
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need
to run their cash and who ought to educate the young for this.

Firstly
, everyone
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need
to be patient, thrifty for managing their
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money
. When
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people
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get
a salary at the
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end
of a month, they
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need
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start
to calculate their necessary requirement for a
next
month.
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Some
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people
obtain currency, they do not consider they
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have to
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live
with this
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money
for a long time
that is
why, they go to a
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restuarant
or a bar and squander most part of
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money
.
As a result
, after a certain period of time they realize that there is not any
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money
for meeting the daily necessity.
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But
for instance
, if they determine everything they can
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need
such food shopping, garment shopping and
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so
on, they will not suffer from this issue.

In my personal opinion,
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parents
should teach this type of things to their
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children
. As we know, they
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give
a certain amount of
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money
to
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children
to satisfy their necessity at school. While
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some
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parents
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give
all
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money
at the beginning of a week, others
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give
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sufficent
quantity for a day. And when
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children
who
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get
whole
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money
in a day spend all of them,
next
day their
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parent
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give
to them
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money
again
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but
they should not.
For example
, if they know that they
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have to
maintain this
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money
for a week and nobody
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give
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antything
to them, they will be
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have
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reponsible
and
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start
to
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seperate
a certain amount
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money
for a day.

In conclusion
,
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people
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have to
plan
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everythin
they can
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need
in a month when they
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get
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money
and
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parents
are liable person for teaching to their
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children
.
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IELTS essay Many people have problems managing their money. What skills does a person need to manage their money well? Who should teach children these skills?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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