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Many people enjoy visiting zoos. Others believe that animals should not be taken from their natural surroundings and put into zoos

Many people enjoy visiting zoos. Others believe that animals should not be taken from their natural surroundings and put into zoos Nrmnd
A lot of people, especially children, are fond of going to the zoo. There they have an opportunity to look at wild animals, exotic birds, insects, reptiles and fish. When we come to the zoo, we can see animals that we would never have a chance to see in our country. But is it right to keep animals in the zoo? Personally, I think that animals should live in their natural habitats. Animals that live in zoos are confined within enclosures and displayed to the public. It is difficult to create ideal captive environments for some species and sometimes animals have to live in bad conditions and look miserable and untidy. They may suffer from lack of space, comfort and good food. Some wild animals feel stressed in captivity. Sometimes they are kept in such small cages that they are unable to turn around. Besides, in spite of prohibition many visitors give animals food that may do harm to their health and cause different diseases. However, some zoos keep fewer animals in larger, outdoor enclosures, rather than in cages. For instance, safari parks allow visitors to drive through them and come in close contact with the animals. What is more, most modern zoos display wild animals primarily for the conservation of endangered species, as well as for research purposes and education, and secondarily for the entertainment of visitors. But I still believe that animals feel much better without people's control. To sum up, I think that the conservation and educational role of zoos should be strengthened. All zoos must be inspected and licensed, and all animals must be provided with a suitable environment.
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children, are fond of going to the zoo. There they have an opportunity to look at wild
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animals
, exotic birds, insects, reptiles and fish. When we
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come
to the zoo, we can
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see
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animals
that we would never have a chance to
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see
in our country.
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is it right to
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keep
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animals
in the zoo?

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, I
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think
that
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animals
should
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live
in their natural habitats.
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Animals
that
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live
in zoos
are confined
within enclosures and displayed to the public. It is difficult to create ideal captive environments for
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some
species and
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animals
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in
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conditions and look miserable and untidy. They may suffer from lack of space, comfort and
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good
food.
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Some
wild
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feel
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stressed
in captivity.
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kept
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small
cages that they are unable to turn around.
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,
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in spite of
prohibition
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many
visitors give
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animals
food that may do harm to their health and cause
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different
diseases.

However
,
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some
zoos
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fewer
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animals
in larger, outdoor enclosures,
rather
than in cages.
For instance
, safari parks
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allow
visitors to drive through them and
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come
in close contact with the
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animals
.
What is more
, most modern zoos display wild
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animals
primarily
for the conservation of endangered species,
as well
as for research purposes and education, and
secondarily
for the entertainment of visitors.
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But
I
still
believe that
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animals
feel much better without
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people
's control.

To sum up, I
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think
that the conservation and educational role of zoos should
be strengthened
. All zoos
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must
be inspected
and licensed, and all
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animals
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must
be provided
with a suitable environment.
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IELTS essay Many people enjoy visiting zoos. Others believe that animals should not be taken from their natural surroundings and put into zoos

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  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
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