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Many people dream of owning their own business but are afraid of the risks, instead of starting a new business, however, one can buy a franchise. A franchise is a license issued by a large, usually well-known, company to a small business owner. Under the

Many people dream of owning their own business but are afraid of the risks, instead of starting a new business, however, one can buy a franchise. A franchise is a license issued by a large, usually well-known, company to a small business owner. Under the pRbEw
Both the reading passage and the lecture arguess the franchise, permison to use the name of large and well-known company and sell its products. With this in mind, the author states that franchise has several advantages for people who want to start up a new business. On the other hand, the professor contradicts all three episodes of arguments mentioned in the passage, believing the results of some study show in opposit of the autor claims. First of all, the writer points out that a franchise eliminates some of the problems that people will be faced when decide to start their own independent business, for instance, trouble in finding reliabe suppliers of goods and services. Conversely, the lecturer makes it clear that some franchises make it force to buy some specific goods and services which are expensive, while there are some cheaper goods in the markets. Second, the reading selection holds the view that an benefit of franchise is elimination of advertisement fee because you will become a part of a well-known and popular brand. However, the lecture explains that people how buy a franchise should pay 6 percent of the total of their income to the company. Moreover, the company doesn't advertise your business and just advertise the brand. So, the individuals do not take advantage of compony advertisment. Finally, the author mentions that franchise is more secure that opening up your own nonfranchise business. On the other hand, the speaker contradicts this idea and explains that the result of study shows that the independent businesses are two times successful than franchise.
Both the reading passage and the lecture
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arguess
the franchise,
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permison
to
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use
the name of large and well-known
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company
and sell its products. With this in mind, the author states that franchise has several advantages for
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people
who want to
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start
up a new
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business
.
On the other hand
, the professor contradicts all three episodes of arguments mentioned in the passage, believing the results of
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some
study
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show
in
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opposit
of the
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autor
claims.

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, the writer points out that a franchise eliminates
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some of the
problems that
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people
will
be faced
when decide to
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start
their
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own
independent
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business
,
for instance
, trouble in finding
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reliabe
suppliers of
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goods
and services.
Conversely
, the lecturer
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makes
it
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clear
that
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some
franchises
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make
it force to
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buy
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some
specific
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goods
and services which are expensive, while there are
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some
cheaper
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goods
in the markets.

Second, the reading selection holds the view that
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an
benefit of franchise is elimination of advertisement fee
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because
you will become a part of a well-known and popular brand.
However
, the lecture
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explains
that
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people
how
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buy
a franchise should pay 6 percent of the total of their income to the
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company
.
Moreover
, the
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company
doesn't advertise your
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business
and
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just
advertise the brand.
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So
, the individuals do not take advantage of
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compony
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advertisment
.

Finally
, the author mentions that franchise is more secure that opening up your
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own
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nonfranchise
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business
.
On the other hand
, the speaker contradicts this
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idea
and
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explains
that the result of study
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shows
that the independent
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businesses
are two times successful than franchise.
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IELTS essay Many people dream of owning their own business but are afraid of the risks, instead of starting a new business, however, one can buy a franchise. A franchise is a license issued by a large, usually well-known, company to a small business owner. Under the

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