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Both the reading passage and the lecture argues the idea of sending humans to Mars. With this in mind, the author states that there are several problems which could be solved in this project. On the othe hand, the lecturer claims that although this projec

Both the reading passage and the lecture argues the idea of sending humans to Mars. With this in mind, the author states that there are several problems which could be solved in this project. On the othe hand, the lecturer claims that although this projec JoYyE
Both the reading passage and the lecture argues the idea of sending humans to mars. With this in mind, the author states that there are several problems which could be solved in this project. On the othe hand, the lecturer claims that although this project is challenging, there are several solution for all the problems that mentioned in the passage. First of all, the writer points the view that it takes aproximately two years to go to mars and back. Therefore, it is not easy to carry enough food, water, and oxygen because of limited capicity of space vehicles. The professor makes it clear that astronauts can use hydroponic technique to cultivate food crops on space with need less space. Moreove, in this maner some amount of water and released oxygen will be produced to meet the astronauts needed. Second, the writing material argues the problem of zero-gravity environment of space and its negative effects on humans body. However, the speaker explains that there are several techniques which can help to astronauts to maintain their health in zero- gravity environment. For instance, there are some regular exercise which prevent decreas of muscle mass and also using some mineral to compensation reduction of bone density. Finally, while the writer explains tremendous amount of space radiation in mars would be dangerous for astronauts and the lack of magnetic field in mars to protect people from solar radiation, the professor contradicts this idea. She makes it clear that the dangerous level of radiation in mars does not exist in all the time. Furthermore, there are some equipment to help astronauts to be safe untile dangerous times pass.
Both the reading passage and the lecture argues the
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idea
of sending humans to
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. With this in mind, the author states that there are several problems which could
be solved
in this project. On the
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hand, the lecturer claims that although this project is challenging, there are
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several solution
for all the problems that mentioned in the passage.

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, the writer points the view that it takes
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aproximately
two years to go to
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mars
and back.
Therefore
, it is not easy to carry
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enough
food, water, and oxygen
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because
of limited
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capicity
of
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space
vehicles. The professor
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makes
it
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clear
that
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astronauts
can
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use
hydroponic technique to cultivate food crops on
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space
with need less
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space
.
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Moreove
, in this
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maner
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some
amount of water and released oxygen will
be produced
to
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meet
the
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astronauts
needed.

Second, the writing material argues the problem of zero-gravity environment of
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space
and its
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negative
effects on humans body.
However
, the speaker
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explains
that there are several techniques which can
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help
to
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astronauts
to maintain their health in zero- gravity environment.
For instance
, there are
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some
regular exercise which
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prevent
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decreas
of muscle mass and
also
using
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some
mineral to compensation reduction of bone density.

Finally
, while the writer
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explains
tremendous amount of
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space
radiation in
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mars
would be
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dangerous
for
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astronauts
and the lack of magnetic field in
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mars
to protect
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people
from solar radiation, the professor contradicts this
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idea
. She
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makes
it
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clear
that the
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dangerous
level of radiation in
The planet and the god are written with uppercase. 'mars' refers to the verb 'mar' meaning to spoil, or the plural of the noun 'mar' meaning blemishes.
mars
does not exist in all the time.
Furthermore
, there are
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some
equipment to
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help
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astronauts
to be safe
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untile
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dangerous
times pass.
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IELTS essay Both the reading passage and the lecture argues the idea of sending humans to Mars. With this in mind, the author states that there are several problems which could be solved in this project. On the othe hand, the lecturer claims that although this projec

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274 words
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