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Many people believe we should continue developing cloning technology. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many people believe we should continue developing cloning technology. v. 2
Cloning has become increasingly popular among particular demographics of society. These people claim that cloning technology must be developed at any price. This essay will argue why investing in cloning is entirely necessary despite some potential risks. Hundreds of people believe that if we drum up our support for cloning technology, it will expand dramatically. For one thing, cloning can be our only way to treat many incurable illnesses. For instance, we can return the walking ability to many humans who sat on wheelchairs. Another thing is with cloning; we may finally be able to put an end to numerous chromosomal disorders. As an illustration, cloning provides us a useful source by which we can have children with not only any ailments but also remarkably stronger. These few instances have bolstered real excitement in humans that cloning development is beneficial, especially for the next generation. Although much of the cloning in our everyday lives has only positive effects, some uses raise controversial issues and questions. In the first place, cloning is just like acting as GOD. An example may help clarify the point. In many religious countries, this field of study remains only theoretical, and scientists are not allowed to work on it. In the second place, even though, cloning has this power to alter damaged genes. However, it may bring some unwanted nasty mutations by itself. As things stand right now, they believe cloning has some side effects which make it unreliable. By comparing and contrasting the pros and cons of cloning, I believe that its upside is significantly more crucial than its downside. To support my position, I would like to offer two primary arguments. Firstly, Doctor Benet, the enchanted head of the medical department of Sidney University, asserts that cloning might be our only hope for ending to selling human organs in black markets. For example, we could make a brand new kidney instead of extracting it from someone else. Secondly, as has been demonstrated before, cloning plants can bring us this chance to eradicate hunger from the earth. In other words, cloning can help humankind much more than we think it does. This essay argued that cloning technology is meritorious. Nevertheless, the question is: Can this technique improve the health and happiness of human beings in general? Only time will tell, but in the meantime, cloning continues to influence every aspect of our every day lives.
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Cloning
has become
increasingly
popular among particular demographics of society. These
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people
claim that
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cloning
technology
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must
be developed
at any price. This essay will argue why investing in
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cloning
is
entirely
necessary despite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
potential
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risks
.

Hundreds of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that if we drum up our support for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cloning
technology, it will expand
dramatically
. For one thing,
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cloning
can be our
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only
way to treat
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
incurable illnesses.
For instance
, we can return the walking ability to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
humans
who sat on wheelchairs. Another thing is with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cloning
; we may
finally
be able to put an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
to numerous chromosomal disorders. As an illustration,
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cloning
provides us a useful source by which we can have children with not
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only
any ailments
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but
also
remarkably
stronger. These few instances have bolstered real excitement in
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humans
that
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cloning
development is beneficial,
especially
for the
next
generation.

Although much of the
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cloning
in our everyday
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lives
has
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only
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positive
effects,
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some
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uses
raise controversial issues and questions. In the
first
place,
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cloning
is
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just
like acting as GOD. An example may
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help
clarify the point. In
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many
religious countries, this field of study remains
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only
theoretical, and scientists are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to work on it. In the second place,
even though
,
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cloning
has this power to alter damaged genes.
However
, it may bring
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some
unwanted nasty mutations by itself. As things stand right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, they believe
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cloning
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
side effects which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it unreliable.

By comparing and contrasting the pros and cons of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cloning
, I believe that its upside is
significantly
more crucial than its downside. To support my position, I would like to offer two primary arguments.
Firstly
, Doctor Benet, the enchanted head of the medical department of Sidney University, asserts that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cloning
might be our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
hope for ending to selling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
organs in black markets.
For example
, we could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
kidney
instead
of extracting it from someone else.
Secondly
, as has
been demonstrated
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before
,
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cloning
plants can bring us this chance to eradicate hunger from the earth.
In other words
,
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cloning
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
humankind much more than we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it does.

This essay argued that
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cloning
technology is meritorious.
Nevertheless
, the question is: Can this technique
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the health and happiness of
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human
beings
in general
?
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Only
time will
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tell
,
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but
in the meantime,
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cloning
continues to influence every aspect of our every day
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lives
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe we should continue developing cloning technology. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
400 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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