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Many people believe they would like to be famous, without considering the consequences. What do you think would be the advantages and disadvantages of being a celebrity? Support your ideas with details and examples. Support your ideas with details and examples.

Many people believe they would like to be famous, without considering the consequences. What do you think would be the advantages and disadvantages of being a celebrity? Support your ideas with details and examples. Support your ideas with details and examples. 0p0V5
OVER THE YEARS, CELEBRITIES HAVE BEEN USED IN PRODUCT ADVERTISEMENT AND PROMOTIONS. THIS WAS INTENDED TO PUBLICIZE AND ALSO INCREASE THE SALES OF THE PRODUCT. THE DESIRE TO BECOME POPULAR KEEPS INCREASING WITH MORE FOCUS ON THE HIGH QUALITY LIFE WITHOUT CONDSIDERING THE MONITORED LIFESTYLE THAT COMES WITH IT. THIS ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN IN DETAILS THE PROS AND CONS OF THIS BELIEF WITH EXAMPLES. TO BEGIN WITH, BEING POPULAR ATTRACTS SOME BENEFIT SUCH AS ACCESS TO HIGH QUALITY LIFE. WHILE FEATURING IN ADVERTISEMENT AND PROMOTIONS, THE COMPANY OFFERS THE PRODUCT AND ALSO COUPONS FOR DISCOUNT ON PURCHASE. NOT ONLY DO THEY ACCESS EXCLUSIVE PRODUCTS AND SERVICES BUT THEY ARE ALSO OPPORTUNED TO MEET AND CONNECT WITH OTHER FAMOUS PERSONALTIES. FOR INSTANCE, A POPULAR NIGERIAN ACTRESS WHO PROMOTED A CEREAL PRODUCT WAS GIVEN A FIFTY THOUSAND WORTH OF ACCESS CARD TO PURCHASE ANY OF THE COMPANY'S PRODUCT. ALSO, A FRIEND OF MINE WHOSE FATHER IS A PROMINENT ARTIST GOT HER VISA TO MIGRATE TO THE UNITED KINGDOM IN NO TIME WHILE I WAS STILL STRUGGLING WITH PROTOCOLS. THE EASE WAS AS A RESULT OF OF THE CONNECTIONS WITH THE FELLOW STARDOM. ON THE OTHER HAND, BEEN KNOWN ALSO ATTRACTS LOTS OF ATTENTION MAJORLY THE LIFESTYLE AS WELL AS BACKGROUND RESEARCH ON THE PAST LIFE OF THESE EMINENT PERSONALTIES. LIFE INCOGNITO IS ALMOST IMPOSSIBLE FOR PROMINENT PEOPLE OWING TO THE FACT THAT PEOPLE AROUND WILL ALWAYS MAKE FUSS AT THEIR PRESCENCE EITHER WITH GOOD OR BAD INTENTIONS. OFTEN TIMES, HIGHLIGHT OF PLACES VISITED AND ATTIRES ARE PUBLISHED IN DAILY NEWS AS WELL AS SCANDALS. FOR INSTANCE, THE WIFE OF A STATE GOVERNOR HAVING A SIDE TALK WITH ANOTHER MAN. SUCH CAPTION AS THIS ARE TARGETED TO EXPOSE THEIR LIFESTYLE. IN ADDITION, I THINK FAME IS DESIRABLE AS IT ALLOWS FOR EXQUISITE AND EXCLUSIVE STANDARD OF LIVING IF THE ATTENTIONS AND ATTRACTIONS CAN BE MINIMIZED. HUMAN ACTIVITIES AND LIFESTYLE SHOULD NOT BE PUBLISHED WITHOUT BEING PERMITTED BY THE CONCERNED PERSON. CONCLUSIVELY, THE POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE EFFECT OF PROMINENCE SHOULD BE WELL CONSIDERED BEFORE DECIDING TO TAKE THE PATH OF FAME AS ONE MIGHT OUTWEIGH THE OTHER.
OVER THE YEARS, CELEBRITIES HAVE BEEN
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USED
IN
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PRODUCT
ADVERTISEMENT AND PROMOTIONS. THIS
WAS INTENDED
TO PUBLICIZE AND
ALSO
INCREASE THE SALES OF THE
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PRODUCT
. THE DESIRE TO BECOME POPULAR
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KEEPS
INCREASING WITH MORE FOCUS ON THE HIGH QUALITY
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LIFE
WITHOUT
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CONDSIDERING
THE MONITORED LIFESTYLE THAT
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COMES
WITH IT. THIS ESSAY WILL
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EXPLAIN
IN
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DETAILS
THE PROS AND CONS OF THIS BELIEF WITH EXAMPLES.

TO
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BEGIN
WITH, BEING POPULAR ATTRACTS
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SOME
BENEFIT SUCH AS ACCESS TO HIGH QUALITY
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LIFE
. WHILE FEATURING IN ADVERTISEMENT AND PROMOTIONS, THE
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COMPANY
OFFERS THE
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PRODUCT
AND
ALSO
COUPONS FOR DISCOUNT ON
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PURCHASE
. NOT
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ONLY
DO THEY ACCESS EXCLUSIVE
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PRODUCTS
AND SERVICES
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BUT
THEY ARE
ALSO
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OPPORTUNED
TO
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MEET
AND CONNECT WITH OTHER
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FAMOUS
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PERSONALTIES
.
FOR INSTANCE
, A POPULAR NIGERIAN ACTRESS WHO PROMOTED A CEREAL
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PRODUCT
WAS
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GIVEN
A FIFTY THOUSAND WORTH OF ACCESS CARD TO
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PURCHASE
ANY OF THE
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COMPANY
'S
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PRODUCT
.
ALSO
, A FRIEND OF MINE WHOSE FATHER IS A PROMINENT ARTIST
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GOT
HER VISA TO MIGRATE TO THE
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UNITED KINGDOM
IN NO TIME WHILE I WAS
STILL
STRUGGLING WITH PROTOCOLS. THE
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EASE
WAS
AS A RESULT
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OF OF
THE CONNECTIONS WITH THE FELLOW STARDOM.

ON THE OTHER HAND
,
BEEN KNOWN
ALSO
ATTRACTS LOTS OF ATTENTION
MAJORLY
THE LIFESTYLE
AS WELL
AS BACKGROUND RESEARCH ON THE PAST
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LIFE
OF THESE EMINENT
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PERSONALTIES
.
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LIFE
INCOGNITO IS ALMOST IMPOSSIBLE FOR PROMINENT
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PEOPLE
OWING TO THE FACT THAT
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PEOPLE
AROUND WILL ALWAYS
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MAKE
FUSS AT THEIR
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PRESCENCE
EITHER WITH
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GOOD
OR
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INTENTIONS.
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OFTEN
TIMES, HIGHLIGHT OF PLACES VISITED AND ATTIRES
ARE PUBLISHED
IN DAILY NEWS
AS WELL
AS SCANDALS.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE WIFE OF A STATE GOVERNOR HAVING A SIDE TALK WITH ANOTHER
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MAN
. SUCH CAPTION AS THIS
ARE TARGETED
TO EXPOSE THEIR LIFESTYLE.

IN ADDITION
, I
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THINK
FAME IS DESIRABLE AS IT
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ALLOWS
FOR EXQUISITE AND EXCLUSIVE STANDARD OF LIVING IF THE ATTENTIONS AND ATTRACTIONS CAN
BE MINIMIZED
. HUMAN ACTIVITIES AND LIFESTYLE SHOULD NOT
BE PUBLISHED
WITHOUT
BEING PERMITTED
BY THE CONCERNED PERSON.

CONCLUSIVELY
, THE
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POSITIVE
AND
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NEGATIVE
EFFECT OF PROMINENCE SHOULD BE WELL CONSIDERED
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BEFORE
DECIDING TO TAKE THE PATH OF FAME AS ONE MIGHT OUTWEIGH THE OTHER.
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IELTS essay Many people believe they would like to be famous, without considering the consequences. What do you think would be the advantages and disadvantages of being a celebrity? Support your ideas with details and examples. Support your ideas with details and examples.

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5 paragraphs
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6.0
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