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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed? wyyr
It is a common idea nowadays, that zoos are only harming the animals that they are keeping. There are many suggestions on how to solve this problem and how to integrate animals into their natural environment. What first comes to my mind is how it affects the lives of creatures living in cages and/or yards. It is essential for children to get to know the animals that live on planet Earth, but somehow, keeping them in closed areas where they do not have any kind of inducement or natural stimulation only makes them less of an animal. This can have harmful kinematic, sensory and dietetic consequences as well. On the other hand, zoos have a positive side as well. If there are any injured animals in the surrounding areas, the employees of the zoo can help them develop certain features. Unfortunately, after they get well, they are never let back to their native environment, because the zoo would not profit on “free animals”. The number of alternative zoos is rising, because people are starting to get more and more conscious of the lives of animals. In these zoos, the animals are not the ones in cages, but the visitors are. This is widely spread in Safaris, where people can enjoy watching lions, elephants and so on. I hope that as we go forward in time, society will be able to see how zoos affect animals and how we could give a better alternative to them.
It is a common
idea
nowadays, that zoos are
only
harming the
animals
that they are keeping. There are
many
suggestions on how to solve this problem and how to integrate
animals
into their natural environment.

What
first
comes
to my mind is how it affects the
lives
of creatures living in cages and/or yards. It is essential for children to
get
to know the
animals
that
live
on planet Earth,
but
somehow, keeping them in closed areas where they do not have any kind of inducement or natural stimulation
only
makes
them less of an animal.

This can have harmful kinematic, sensory and dietetic consequences
as well
.

On the other hand
, zoos have a
positive
side
as well
. If there are any injured
animals
in the surrounding areas, the employees of the zoo can
help
them develop certain features. Unfortunately, after they
get
well, they are never
let
back to their native environment,
because
the zoo would not profit on “free animals”.

The number of alternative zoos is rising,
because
people
are starting to
get
more and more conscious of the
lives
of
animals
. In these zoos, the
animals
are not the ones in cages,
but
the visitors are. This is
widely
spread in Safaris, where
people
can enjoy watching lions, elephants and
so
on.

I hope that as we go forward in time, society will be able to
see
how zoos affect
animals
and how we could give a better alternative to them.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

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