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Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed? 08G9
In fact, zoos always have and complete a rescue mission for rare species of animals, which are in dangerous evolutional situations. Overall, the very common opinion about zoos for nowadays, zoos should be closed and this point of view is appeared by the reasons like: zoos taunt some animal species for their income, also a very common position is zoos is like a reserve for animals, but without strong security. First of all, zoos are the places in which people come to see many rare species of animals and have the satisfaction and good emotions of attending it. In my personal point of view, they complete this mission fully. As far as I know, a very common problem in zoos is an unworthy attitude to different species, also less than the basic quantity of food without the best quality of these products for animals. The Government of any country has other independent point for zoos, which increasing states budget, when its can invest all money for animals sole for reserves or for shelters without lose in addition part of country’s budget. If, in continuing my previous idea about investment for reserves or for shelters, I guess if the governmental structures will organize these operations to closing zoos and transferring animals to other “hands”. In conclusion, I am strongly sure about income to all members of these process, since the Government can save a significant part of one year invests, people will spend less cash for tickets than in zoo’s ticket, rare species of animals will have more facilities for comfortable livelihood.
In fact, zoos always have and complete a rescue mission for rare species of
animals
, which are in
dangerous
evolutional
situations.
Overall
, the
very
common opinion about zoos for nowadays, zoos should
be closed
and this point of view
is appeared
by the reasons like: zoos taunt
some
animal
species for their income,
also
a
very
common position is zoos is like a reserve for
animals
,
but
without strong security.

First of all
, zoos are the places in which
people
come
to
see
many
rare species of
animals
and have the satisfaction and
good
emotions of attending it. In my personal point of view, they complete this mission
fully
. As far as I know, a
very
common problem in zoos is an unworthy attitude to
different
species,
also
less than the basic quantity of food without the best quality of these products for
animals
. The
Government
of any country has other independent point for zoos, which increasing states budget, when its can invest all money for
animals
sole for reserves or for shelters without lose
in addition
part of country’s budget.

If, in continuing my previous
idea
about investment for reserves or for shelters, I guess if the governmental structures will organize these operations to closing zoos and transferring
animals
to other “hands”.

In conclusion
, I am
strongly
sure about income to all members of these process, since the
Government
can save a significant part of one year invests,
people
will spend less cash for tickets than in zoo’s ticket, rare species of
animals
will have more facilities for comfortable livelihood.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

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