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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society? To what extent do you agree? v.1

Social networking sites reckon to have a detrimental effect on individuals as well as the community. In my opinion, social media has its advantages and drawbacks for the people and society. The beneficial impact of social platforms is undeniable as these networking sites increase the correlation between individuals. It has become easier than ever for people to reach out to each other through social media such as Facebook or Instagram. It is also particularly convenient for self-education through online, virtual classes with educational platforms such as Zoom and YouTube. Thus, although social media may be believed to have an adverse impact on daily life, its influence is unquestionable. On the other hand, the effect of Facebook and other social platforms can be seen as harmful. Social media use may lead to addiction. It is when a person overly concerns about social media and devotes a considerable amount of time and effort to use it. As an increasing number ofpeople prone to spend too much time online, real-life relationships, responsibilities, and even physical health are neglected. Social networking sites may have their benefits, they may also cause harm to the person using them and society in general. In conclusion, although social networking sites have brought individuals closer together, they have also harmed the people that overuse them.
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networking
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sites
reckon to have a detrimental effect on individuals
as well
as the community. In my opinion,
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social
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media
has its advantages and drawbacks for the
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people
and society.

The beneficial impact of
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social
platforms is undeniable as these networking
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sites
increase the correlation between individuals. It has become easier than ever for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to reach out to each other through
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social
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media
such as Facebook or Instagram. It is
also
particularly
convenient for self-education through online, virtual classes with educational platforms such as Zoom and YouTube.
Thus
, although
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social
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media
may
be believed
to have an adverse impact on daily life, its influence is unquestionable.

On the other hand
, the effect of Facebook and other
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social
platforms can be
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seen
as harmful.
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Social
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media
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use
may lead to addiction. It is when a person
overly
concerns about
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social
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media
and devotes a considerable amount of time and effort to
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use
it. As an increasing number ofpeople prone to spend too much time online, real-life relationships, responsibilities, and even physical health
are neglected
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Social
networking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sites
may have their benefits, they may
also
cause harm to the person using them and society
in general
.

In conclusion
, although
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social
networking
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sites
have brought individuals closer together, they have
also
harmed the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
that overuse them.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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  American English
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