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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree? v.7

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 7
Around the globe, almost in every sphere of human activity the Internet is apparent, today considering the high level of media coverage. Although some argue that the Internet nowadays has been bringing bad effects to persons commonalty. It is disagree that people cannot live without network. The first thing that should be mentioned that no society in the world has ever developed without network. One specific example of this is that the Internet is considered a powerful means of communication, according to recent research. This clearly illustrates that people are able to send messages from long distance. Another example, in the society, people enjoy making online friends. Such as Facebook and Yahoo, they can use of the Internet. Furthermore another substantial argument in favour of network is extremely important in which people are able to provide much information with each other. Take bringing knowledge to people for instance. This example makes it clear that individuals know more about society. Additionally, in the society, through network, many children can make friends easily. The websites, create an online network which connects no matter where they are. So, people can learn sufficient information, lying within their society. In conclusion, taking these points into consideration after analysing impact of network on persons and community, I am in line to believe that most people think that network is unreachable for society. But, it is expected that there is much convenience of network. Because, the Internet is considered the source of information.
Around the globe, almost in every sphere of human activity the Internet is apparent,
today
considering the high level of media coverage.
Although
some
argue that the Internet nowadays has been bringing
bad
effects to persons commonalty. It is
disagree
that
people
cannot
live
without network.

The
first
thing that should
be mentioned
that no
society
in the world has ever developed without
network
. One specific example of this is that the Internet
is considered
a powerful means of communication, according to recent research. This
clearly
illustrates that
people
are able to
send
messages from long distance. Another example, in the
society
,
people
enjoy making online friends. Such as Facebook and Yahoo, they can
use
of the Internet.

Furthermore
another substantial argument in
favour
of
network
is
extremely
important
in which
people
are able to provide much information with each other. Take bringing knowledge to
people
for instance
. This example
makes
it
clear
that individuals know more about
society
.
Additionally
, in the
society
, through
network
,
many
children can
make
friends
easily
. The websites, create an online
network
which connects no matter where they are.
So
,
people
can learn sufficient information, lying within their society.

In conclusion
, taking these points into consideration after
analysing
impact of
network
on persons and community, I am in line to believe that most
people
think
that
network
is unreachable for
society
.
But
, it is
expected
that there is much convenience of
network
.
Because
, the Internet
is considered
the source of information.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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