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Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society.To what extent do you agree?

Technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds and social networking sites are that innovation of technology that makes this huge world of our look small. However, a fair of amount of people believe, such sites have devastating effect on everyone's life. I do not completely accord with it because everything has its pros and cons and social sites are no exception. To initiate with, there are several reasons how social sites can affect our lives adversely? First of all, the complusion to use social media makes one social media addict. Researchers at chicago university concluded that addiction to social sites such as facebook is stronger than addiction to smoking or alcohol. Secondly, use of social sites may expose individuals, in particular teens and children to pornography. Besides unleashing age - inappropriate content, digital age also gave birth to cyberbullying which leads to depression - like symptoms, anxiety and high level of stress. Apart from this, risk of fraud or identity theft, invasion of privacy and time waster are also the drawbacks of these sites which cannot be ignored. However, undoubtedly, these sites has been a boon for those people who use it wisely. Social networking sites provide people an opportunity to expand their network, enhance careers, make friends, recruit employees and find people with scarce skills. Moreover, sites such as facebook and Google + are very much user friendly and are free which make them accessible to everyone. To conclude, we may be a lot safer if we use technology prudently. Perhaps now is the time to make healthy choices. Social sites can be used for good just as easily as these are used to harm others.
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social
networking
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sites
are that innovation of technology that
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makes
this huge world of our look
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small
.
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, a
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fair
of amount of
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people
believe, such
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sites
have devastating effect on everyone's life. I do not completely accord with it
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because
everything has its pros and cons and
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social
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sites
are no exception.

To initiate with, there are several reasons how
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social
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sites
can affect our
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lives
adversely
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, the
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complusion
to
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use
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social
media
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makes
one
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social
media addict. Researchers at
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chicago
university concluded that addiction to
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social
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sites
such as
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facebook
is stronger than addiction to smoking or alcohol.

Secondly
,
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use
of
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social
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sites
may expose individuals,
in particular
teens and children to pornography.
Besides
unleashing age
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-
inappropriate content, digital age
also
gave birth to cyberbullying which leads to depression
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-
like symptoms, anxiety and high level of
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stress
. Apart from this,
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risk
of fraud or identity theft, invasion of privacy and time waster are
also
the drawbacks of these
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sites
which cannot be
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ignored
.

However
,
undoubtedly
, these
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sites
has been a boon for those
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people
who
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use
it
wisely
.
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Social
networking
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sites
provide
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people
an opportunity to expand their network, enhance careers,
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make
friends, recruit employees and find
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people
with scarce
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skills
.
Moreover
,
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sites
such as
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facebook
and Google + are
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very
much
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user friendly
and are free which
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make
them accessible to everyone.

To conclude
, we may be a lot safer if we
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use
technology
prudently
. Perhaps
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now
is the time to
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make
healthy choices.
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Social
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sites
can be
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used
for
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good
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just
as
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as these are
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used
to harm others.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
5.5
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