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Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree? v.3

Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 3
It is often argued by many that social networking sites have numerous bad impacts on people and society. In my opinion, I do agree that they have had damaging effect on the society. However, I believe it brings positive impact on individuals. This essay will firstly discuss the benefits of social networking sites on individuals and secondly the drawbacks of it on the society. The impact of social media has had on each individual has clear advantage. Firstly, communication has never been easier without social media. That means, it is extremely easy for people to interact with their friends and family by using social networking tools such as Facebook, even when they are thousand miles away from them. For instance, a girl from Germany will be able to communicate with her Malaysian friend by just pressing a button on Facebook, with no cost at all. On the other hand, social media sites have had on society can only be seen as negative. In this modern world, people are very likely to be more interested to play with their phone instead of talking to their family or friends in person, which resulted in bad relationship. It also means, people are more likely to have bad communication with their loved ones. For example, it has been reported by Times that there are 50% of the people who has broken up for spending too much time on social media. To conclude, although social networking has brought individuals closer together, it has negative impacts on the society. The community should always balance out the time that they should spend on social media in order to have a healthy relationship between people.
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often
argued by
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many
that
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social
networking sites have numerous
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bad
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impacts
on
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people
and
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society
. In my opinion, I do
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agree
that they have had damaging effect on the
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society
.
However
, I believe it brings
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positive
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impact
on
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individuals
. This essay will
firstly
discuss the benefits of
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social
networking sites on
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individuals
and
secondly
the drawbacks of it on the society.

The
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impact
of
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social
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media
has had on each
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individual
has
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clear
advantage.
Firstly
, communication has never been easier without
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social
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media
. That means, it is
extremely
easy for
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people
to interact with their friends and family by using
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social
networking tools such as Facebook, even when they are
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thousand
miles away from them.
For instance
, a girl from Germany will be able to communicate with her Malaysian friend by
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just
pressing a button on Facebook, with no cost at all.

On the other hand
,
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social
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media
sites have had on
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society
can
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only
be
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seen
as
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negative
. In this modern world,
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people
are
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very
likely to be more interested to play with their phone
instead
of talking to their family or friends in person, which resulted in
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bad
relationship. It
also
means,
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people
are more likely to have
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bad
communication with their
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loved
ones.
For example
, it has
been reported
by Times that there are 50% of the
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people
who has broken up for spending too much time on
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social
media.

To conclude
, although
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social
networking has brought
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individuals
closer together, it has
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negative
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impacts
on the
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society
. The community should always balance out the time that they should spend on
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social
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media
in order to have a healthy relationship between
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people
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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