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many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree??

many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. ? Ne1N
It is supposed that about lifestyle of famous personalities which is published by forum, have a adverse impact on minors. I disagree with the statement as sometimes coverage of such person can be fruitful for teens, although it has some negative results. I will shed light on my views in forthcoming paragraphs. To begin with, considering the merits which may be enjoy by the adolescents, first and foremost is many television shows host by well know celebrities which encourage people to do some social works and brush up poverty-stricken people's life. To elaborate this, famous program 'satya Mave Jayte' telecast on screen which is host by popular Bollywood actor Aamir khan, the show focuses on sensitive social issues prevalent in India such as female feticides, child sexual abuse, rape, honors killings, domestic violence, untouchability, alcoholism, and the criminalization of politics. It aims to bring the great achievements of people which often go unnoticed in order to encourage the audience to achieve their goals no matter what comes in between. It also aims to empower citizens with information about their country, and urge them to take action and become a helping hand for others. On the other side, in the present era, young generation are attracted by the wealthy lifestyle of famous personalities and they started to following them. They try to walk like them and talk like them and forget their moral values. Some advertisements presented by such a celebrities are very dangerous for children. For instance, in a coca cola commercial, dangerous stunts are performed by the actors to achieve a small coke bottle and teenagers are try to do same like them which may lead to serious injurie or may be death. In addition to it, public figure person's drug addition habit give a bad impact on children because they follow them and think that it looks good in public. To conclude it, adolescents should adopt good habits of such a famous people and following them an instead of try their unsafe stunts and drug habits and media also try to telecast beneficial thing on television so that the next generation will do social work and help needy ones.
It
is supposed
that about lifestyle of
famous
personalities which
is published
by forum, have
a
adverse impact on minors. I disagree with the statement as
sometimes
coverage of such person can be fruitful for teens, although it has
some
negative
results. I will shed light on my views in forthcoming paragraphs.

To
begin
with, considering the merits which may be
enjoy
by the adolescents,
first
and foremost is
many
television
shows
host by well know celebrities which encourage
people
to do
some
social works and brush up poverty-stricken
people
's life. To elaborate this,
famous
program '
satya
Mave
Jayte
' telecast on screen which is host by popular Bollywood actor
Aamir
khan, the
show
focuses on sensitive social issues prevalent in India such as female
feticides
, child sexual abuse, rape, honors killings, domestic violence,
untouchability
, alcoholism, and the criminalization of politics. It aims to bring the great achievements of
people
which
often
go unnoticed in order to encourage the audience to achieve their goals no matter what
comes
in between. It
also
aims to empower citizens with information about their country, and urge them to take action and become a helping hand for others.

On the other side, in the present era, young generation
are attracted
by the wealthy lifestyle of
famous
personalities and
they
started
to following them. They try to walk like them and talk like them and forget their moral values.
Some
advertisements presented by such
a celebrities
are
very
dangerous
for children.
For instance
, in a coca cola commercial,
dangerous
stunts
are performed
by the actors to achieve a
small
coke bottle and
teenagers
are try to do same like them which may lead to serious
injurie
or may be death.
In addition
to it, public figure person's drug addition habit give a
bad
impact on children
because
they follow them and
think
that it looks
good
in public.

To conclude
it, adolescents should adopt
good
habits of such a
famous
people
and following them an
instead
of try their unsafe stunts and drug habits and media
also
try to telecast beneficial thing on television
so
that the
next
generation will do social work and
help
needy ones.
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IELTS essay many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. ?

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