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MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT LIVING A CITY LIFE OFFERS GREATER BENEFITS AS COMPARED TO THE COUNTRY SIDE? AGREE OR DISAGREE

MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT LIVING A CITY LIFE OFFERS GREATER BENEFITS AS COMPARED TO THE COUNTRY SIDE? AGREE OR DISAGREE 6aRy8
It is obviously clear that, plenty of peoples believe that manner of living in a town provides valuable things more than the small town. Exactly, in a town and village has consist it's own benefits and own opportunities whole the time. Then my opinion has depends on the following reasons. Firstly let us take a look at, the main facilities of schools and universities situations in this both places. According to the my knowledge, the high quality schools and universities has been developed in town side. On the other hand, government has been gives widely different support for construction which is these types of buildings. For instance, better known educational institutes such as oxford university, Harvard university and ect has been constructed in city side. Although, this section illustrates the road facilities in the large town and small town. In my view, the longest highway systems and considerably road access were belongs in a developed city areas. The evidence highlights that, 3000 mileage beter known highway system in Australia known as a Great Ocean Road. On the contrary, the fresh air that means, belongs in green environment situation. For example, the village that surrounded by green paddy fields and provides natural air whole the areas. As well in my investigation found that, nother reason of find out job sectors. It's not easier to find in a city for the livehood. Due to it depends on the following requirements. The major one is that education such as qualifications, experience and technology knowledge. In addition, job demands and handsome salaries. Consequently, cultivation is the main income source of in a region areas. The farmers has been referred to cultivated mainly rice, fruits and vegetables. Futhermore, they continue animals farming in order to get it eggs and varied meats. Nevertheless, their own harvest has been shared with the supermarket holders where is the located in country side. To summarise, there are two sides to a coin. Finally, there are some benefits was depends on the own sources. In brief, I'm halfly agree with this statement but I need to highlight that, currently the villages also were became slightly reached the same levels of cities on the different sectors.
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that,
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of peoples believe that manner of living in a
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town
provides valuable things more than the
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small
town.

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town
and village has
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consist
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it's
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benefits and
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opportunities whole the time. Then my opinion has depends on the following reasons.
Firstly
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let
us take a look at, the main facilities of schools and
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universities
situations in this both places. According to
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the my knowledge
, the high quality schools and
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universities
has
been developed
in
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town
side.
On the other hand
,
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government
has been gives
widely
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different
support for construction which is these types of buildings.
For instance
, better known educational institutes such as oxford
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university
, Harvard
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university
and
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ect
has
been constructed
in city side. Although, this section illustrates the road facilities in the large
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town
and
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small
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town
. In my view, the longest highway systems and
considerably
road access were belongs in a developed city
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areas
. The evidence highlights that, 3000 mileage
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beter
known highway system in Australia known as a Great Ocean Road.

On the contrary
, the fresh air that means, belongs in green environment situation.
For example
, the village that surrounded by green paddy fields and provides natural air whole the areas.
As well
in my investigation found that,
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nother
reason of find out job sectors. It's not easier to find in a city for the
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livehood
. Due to it depends on the following requirements. The major one is that education such as qualifications, experience and technology knowledge.
In addition
, job demands and handsome salaries.
Consequently
, cultivation is the main income source of in a region areas. The farmers
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been referred
to cultivated
mainly
rice, fruits and vegetables.
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, they continue animals farming in order to
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it eggs and varied meats.
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, their
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harvest has
been shared
with the supermarket holders where is the located in country side.

To
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summarise
, there are two sides to a coin.
Finally
, there are
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benefits was depends on the
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own
sources.

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, I'm
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halfly
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agree
with this statement
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currently
the villages
also
were
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slightly
reached the same levels of
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cities
on the
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different
sectors.
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IELTS essay MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT LIVING A CITY LIFE OFFERS GREATER BENEFITS AS COMPARED TO THE COUNTRY SIDE? AGREE OR DISAGREE

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
365 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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