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many people believe that it is better to educate boys and girls in different schools. However, others think they should study together in mixed school. Discuss the two views and give your opinions

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Several people hold that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Yet, others are of belief that the two sexes benefit more from studying together at the same schools. I think that the latter far outweighs the former. The facts have proven that the number of mixed schools for boys and girls is much greater than that for mono gender. There are some reasons for that. First, any child needs to be given the foundation of harmonic education. In this setting, apart from some essential subjects, they have opportunities to learn other important aspects of our lives, for example, psychology and science of humans’ genders and even sex safety. With the absence of either gender, it will be much more difficult for the other gender to understand, imagine and practice these subjects. Furthermore, if one class has only boys, the boys will tend to be more aggressive, less generous, less willing to help and share with females, and less knowledgeable in terms of gender orientation. For girls, if they have to study in the class where there are only girls, they will find it difficult to be motivated to perform better at schools. With the two genders in the same class, they will be likely to enjoy and succeed more when they are involved in some activities that require the strength of boys and dexterity of girls or teamwork spirit of both, for instance, camping and team-building. However, the separate schools for young males and females are suitable for some vocational purposes. For example, if a certain number of girls want to become footballers, they can not study with boys in one class as football competitions are held for separate sexes. Likewise, when some boys wish to become professional wrestlers, they find it better to attend the wrestling class with boys only since boys are physically stronger than girls, and therefore, they can not train together with girls due to the physiologic physical differences. In sum, except for some special cases that the characteristics of genders make the separation for schools of boys and girls necessary, most of the time, studying at mixed schools is most effective and reasonable as compared to any other forms of education.
Several
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hold that it is better to educate
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and
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in separate
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.
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. I
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that the latter far outweighs the former.

The facts have proven that the number of mixed
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schools
for
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and
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girls
is much greater than that for mono gender. There are
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reasons for that.
First
, any child needs to be
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given
the foundation of harmonic education. In this setting, apart from
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some
essential subjects, they have opportunities to learn
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other
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important
aspects of our
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lives
,
for example
, psychology and science of humans’ genders and even sex safety. With the absence of either gender, it will be much more difficult for the
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other
gender to understand, imagine and practice these subjects.
Furthermore
, if one
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class
has
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only
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boys
, the
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boys
will tend to be more aggressive, less generous, less willing to
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help
and share with females, and less knowledgeable in terms of gender orientation. For
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girls
, if they
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have to
study in the
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where there are
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only
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girls
, they will find it difficult to
be motivated
to perform better at
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schools
. With the two genders in the same
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class
, they will be likely to enjoy and succeed more when they
are involved
in
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some
activities that require the strength of
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boys
and dexterity of
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girls
or teamwork spirit of both,
for instance
, camping and team-building.

However
, the separate
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schools
for young males and females are suitable for
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some
vocational purposes.
For example
, if a certain number of
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girls
want to become footballers, they can not study with
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boys
in one
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class
as football competitions
are held
for separate sexes.
Likewise
, when
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some
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wish to become professional wrestlers, they find it better to attend the wrestling
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class
with
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boys
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since
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are
physically
stronger than
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girls
, and
therefore
, they can not train together with
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girls
due to the physiologic physical differences.

In sum,
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except for
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some
special cases that the characteristics of genders
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make
the separation for
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of
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boys
and
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necessary, most of the time, studying at mixed
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schools
is most effective and reasonable as compared to any
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other
forms of education.
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IELTS essay many people believe that it is better to educate boys and girls in different schools. However, others think they should study together in mixed school. Discuss the two views and give your opinions

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