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Many people believe that cigarette smoking has had a negative impact for far too long and the only solution to end ot, is to make cigarettes illegall worldwide. To what extent to you agree or disagree? Give explanations and examples to support your opinion.

Many people believe that cigarette smoking has had a negative impact for far too long and the only solution to end ot, is to make cigarettes illegall worldwide. Give explanations and examples to support your opinion. BJp5w
The cigarette is a common bad nature for many people in our society. This ever - increasing bad habit can cause detrimental effects to the respiratory, not only smokers, but also for surrounding people as they inhale the smoke coming out of cigarettes. The cancer rate has been increased due to the cigarette and governments in many countries ought to ban smoking. I partially agree with this notion because it is a feasible solution to combat all the negative impacts caused by this bad habit, however this technique can destruct the economy. It is considered, that the best process to end this nature is to make it illegal. Implementing this law, people would fear to sell or buy cigarettes because of the imposition of a fine or even the jail. For example, in many countries which are ceasing to ban smoking, offenders who trade or smoke a cigarette will either pay a fine of 600 dollars or go to prison for one month. However, this process may have negative impacts for the economy. A sudden on ban of smoking would lead to the increase rate of poverty and unemployment. Many cigarette companies would go bankrupt and millions of people worldwide would lose their jobs. Moreover, this style may increase the criminality rate, the illegal actions and people would financially suffer. For instance, individuals who their income is depending from the smoking, trade may decide to become illegal dealers in order to sustain his standard of living. This action definitely jeopardizes their freedom. Therefore, banning cigarettes may not be the best solution. To conclude, making the crop illegal that would definitely help with premature death and decreasing the cancer risk. Nevertheless, this might not be the best resolve as this recipe, would cause negative impacts to the society. As such, it is worth considering other options before implementing such drastic measures.
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smokers,
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also
for surrounding
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people
as they inhale the smoke coming out of
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cigarettes
. The cancer rate has
been increased
due to the
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cigarette
and
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governments
in
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many
countries ought to ban
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smoking
. I
partially
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agree
with this notion
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because
it is a feasible solution to combat all the
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negative
impacts caused by this
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bad
habit,
however
this technique can destruct the economy.

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is considered
, that the best process to
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end
this nature is to
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make
it
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illegal
. Implementing this law,
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people
would fear to sell or
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buy
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cigarettes
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because
of the imposition of a fine or even the jail.
For example
, in
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many
countries which are ceasing to ban
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smoking
, offenders who trade or smoke a
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cigarette
will either pay a fine of 600 dollars or go to prison for one month.
However
, this process may have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impacts for the economy.

A sudden on ban of
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smoking
would lead to the increase rate of poverty and unemployment.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
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cigarette
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companies
would go bankrupt and millions of
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people
worldwide would lose their jobs.
Moreover
, this style may increase the criminality rate, the
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illegal
actions and
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people
would
financially
suffer.
For instance
, individuals who their income
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is depending
from the
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smoking
, trade may decide to become
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illegal
dealers in order to sustain his standard of living. This action definitely jeopardizes their freedom.
Therefore
, banning
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cigarettes
may not be the best solution.

To conclude
, making the crop
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illegal
that would definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with premature death and decreasing the cancer
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risk
.
Nevertheless
, this might not be the best resolve as this recipe, would cause
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impacts to the society. As such, it is worth considering other options
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before
implementing such drastic measures.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that cigarette smoking has had a negative impact for far too long and the only solution to end ot, is to make cigarettes illegall worldwide. Give explanations and examples to support your opinion.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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