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Many people believe in the idea of school children wearing a school uniform, but should teachers as well be required to conform to a dress code? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.3

Many people believe in the idea of school children wearing a school uniform, but should teachers as well be required to conform to a dress code? v. 3
Some people believe that these days a great deal of languages is going to die out. The majority of people emphasise that those languages must be funded in order to enhance, whilst others say that investing bill in this sphere would be a waste. Personally, I believe that the authorities should not allocate money to this trend, because there are a lot of languages which can be used. Investing property in order to improve the languages can be very positive idea. Because when the government spend cash in order to increase the popularity of language, the number of people interested in this obviously is going to increase. As a result, the proportion of speakers of the language tends to increase and it may support the language being spoken among other people too. On the other hand a majority of people would argue that spending money to preserving these languages can be a waste. What I mean by this is the languages must be on their own and improve itself if there would be any demand. Instead, authorities need to think about providing money on public services such as: education and transport. As a result, the individuals feel more pleased to the government and governments can have a closer relationship with the people. Moreover, I think that governments must allow local people to speak languages and should not ban them. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government does not have to distribute a special money in this field, but they must provide enough attention.
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must
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money
to this trend,
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because
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languages
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used
.

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positive
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when the
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government
spend cash in order to increase the popularity of
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language
, the number of
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people
interested in this
obviously
is going to increase.
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, the proportion of speakers of the
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language
tends to increase and it may support the
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language
being spoken
among other
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people
too.

On the other hand
a majority of
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people
would argue that spending
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money
to preserving these
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languages
can be a waste. What I mean by this is the
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languages
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must
be on their
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itself if there would be any demand.
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, authorities need to
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about providing
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money
on public services such as: education and transport.
As a result
, the individuals feel more
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pleased
to the
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government
and
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governments
can have a closer relationship with the
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people
.
Moreover
, I
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think
that
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governments
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must
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allow
local
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people
to speak
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languages
and should not ban them.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that the
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government
does not
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have to
distribute a special
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money
in this field,
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they
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must
provide
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IELTS essay Many people believe in the idea of school children wearing a school uniform, but should teachers as well be required to conform to a dress code? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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