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Many people are travelling to other countries. Why? Is it a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people are travelling to other countries. Why? Is it a positive or negative development? jR8JM
International tourism has been continuously growing and become one of the leading economic sectors of many countries all over the world. This essay will discuss about the causes of this phenomenon, as well as its effects. There are two possible reasons why travelling abroad is gaining popularity. Firstly, the national economic development leads to the higher living standard of people in these countries. When people cover their basic needs and still have money at disposal, they tend to spend it on travelling. For example, in China, the exponential growth of the economy gives a rise to millions of new upper and middle class each year. These people have higher demand for travelling and consider travel as way of relaxation. As a result, the Chinese has become the extravagant spenders for global tourism. Secondly, the development of digital services makes distant booking via Internet possible. Therefore, people could read online reviews to choose the destinations, making reservations, arrange accommodation instantly. The convenience that the Internet brings contributes to the tremendous growth of abroad traveling. In my opinion, this development have both positive and negative effects. On the bright side, immersing in the foreign cultures enables tourists to have better cross-cultural understanding, breaking false assumption and stereotype of a country. For example: African…. Moreover, international tourism industry fuels the economy as it creates huge profits from foreign people while generates numerous jobs for the local people. On the dark side, global tourism can have adverse effect on the environment and the local culture of the host countries. The increasing number of flights worldwide gives a rise to the carbon dioxide emission to the air, accelerating climate change. In conclusion, I believe that there are two main reasons for the development of travelling abroad and that this trend could have both positive and negative effects.
International
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continuously
growing and become one of the leading economic sectors of
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all over the world. This essay will
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causes of this phenomenon,
as well
as its effects.

There are two possible reasons why
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travelling
abroad is gaining popularity.
Firstly
, the national economic
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development
leads to the higher living standard of
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people
in these
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countries
. When
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people
cover their basic needs and
still
have money at disposal, they tend to spend it on
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travelling
.
For example
, in China, the exponential growth of the economy gives a rise to millions of new upper and middle
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class
each year. These
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people
have higher demand for
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travelling
and consider travel as way of relaxation.
As a result
, the Chinese has become the extravagant spenders for global
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tourism
.
Secondly
, the
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development
of digital services
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makes
distant booking via Internet possible.
Therefore
,
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people
could read online reviews to choose the destinations, making reservations, arrange accommodation
instantly
. The convenience that the Internet brings contributes to the tremendous growth of abroad traveling.

In my opinion, this
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development
have both
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positive
and
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negative
effects. On the bright side, immersing in the foreign cultures enables tourists to have better cross-cultural understanding, breaking false assumption and stereotype of a
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country
.
For example
: African….
Moreover
, international
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tourism
industry fuels the economy as it creates huge profits from foreign
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people
while generates numerous jobs for the local
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people
. On the dark side, global
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tourism
can have adverse effect on the environment and the local culture of the host
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countries
. The increasing number of flights worldwide gives a rise to the carbon dioxide emission to the air, accelerating climate
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change
.

In conclusion
, I believe that there are two main reasons for the
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development
of
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travelling
abroad and that this trend could have both
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positive
and
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negative
effects.
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IELTS essay Many people are travelling to other countries. Why? Is it a positive or negative development?

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