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Many people are successful in life, which can be explained not only by their hard work.

Many people are successful in life, which can be explained not only by their hard work. In this essay, I am going to consider that luck is as important as the ability to dedicate our time and energy to work. We must acknowledge that without a deep understanding of what we do and how we do we can hardly achieve positive outcomes. There are millions of employees who do not go beyond their duties, not moving deeper to comprehend that the process is about. Consequently, they see only a visible side of the iceberg. They are quite satisfied being paid a decent salary and having some bonuses. Such people do not look for challenges; they treasure stability and are not ready for changes. They can spend a whole life doing one and the same work, even if it is extremely boring and irritating, On the other hand, there are absolutely different people who do not only dedicate all their time to work but comprehend all the stages, distinguish the bonds and even make efforts to improve these processes. Needless to say, it takes a lot of time and inner strength. These people are said to be "burning at work", as they cannot imagine their existence without it. The job for them is not only a source of wealth but something they are fond and proud of. Undoubtedly luck plays an invaluable part in climbing a professional ladder. For example, I worked as a teacher of English in Ukraine. 5 years ago it was my first attempt to take part in the programme "Excellence in Teaching" held by the American Department of Education. Despite all my efforts, I was not able to go further than the semifinal. There were two opposite feelings struggling within- the desire to give up and the enormous intention to win. The most unbearable thing was that I could not figure out where I had made a mistake. The next year I filled in the same application forms and wrote exactly the same essay. To my amazement, I became a winner and was granted a scholarship at George Mason University, Virginia. I doubt it can be explained other factors than the luck. Overall, hard work cannot be underestimated. But only with luck a person can achieve recognisable success. We all should dedicate ourselves to our jobs and climb new summits
Many
people
are successful in life, which can be
explained
not
only
by their
hard
work
. In this essay, I am going to consider that luck is as
important
as the ability to dedicate our time and energy to work.

We
must
acknowledge that without a deep understanding of what we do and how we do we can hardly achieve
positive
outcomes. There are millions of employees who do not go beyond their duties, not moving deeper to comprehend that the process is about.
Consequently
, they
see
only
a visible side of the iceberg. They are quite satisfied
being paid
a decent salary and having
some
bonuses. Such
people
do not look for challenges; they treasure stability and are not ready for
changes
. They can spend a whole life doing one and the same
work
, even if it is
extremely
boring and irritating,

On the other hand
, there are
absolutely
different
people
who do not
only
dedicate all their time to
work
but
comprehend all the stages, distinguish the bonds and even
make
efforts to
improve
these processes. Needless to say, it takes
a lot of
time and inner strength. These
people
are said
to be
"
burning at work
"
, as they cannot imagine their existence without it. The job for them is not
only
a source of wealth
but
something they are fond and proud of.

Undoubtedly
luck plays an invaluable part in climbing a professional ladder.
For example
, I worked as a teacher of English in Ukraine. 5 years ago it was my
first
attempt to
take part
in the
programme
"
Excellence in Teaching
"
held by the American Department of Education. Despite all my efforts, I was not able to go
further
than the semifinal. There were two opposite feelings struggling within- the desire to give up and the enormous intention to win. The most unbearable thing was that I could not figure out where I had made a mistake. The
next
year I filled in the same application forms and wrote exactly the same essay. To my amazement, I became a winner and
was granted
a scholarship at George Mason University, Virginia. I doubt it can be
explained
other factors than the luck.

Overall
,
hard
work
cannot
be underestimated
.
But
only
with luck a person can achieve
recognisable
success. We all should dedicate ourselves to our jobs and climb new
summits
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IELTS essay Many people are successful in life, which can be explained not only by their hard work.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
392 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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