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Many people are doing their shopping on the internet, nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages? v.4

Many people are doing their shopping on the internet, nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages? v. 4
The advancement in technology has made online shopping increasingly popular among several individuals. This essay will first, discuss convenience and easy return or exchange policy as the advantages and further, outline false and misleading information about goods as the major disadvantage. The foremost advantage of electronic shopping is that it is effortlessly accessible and comfortable. In the other words, people can get access to shopping websites anytime as per their convenience. As a result, this has saved people's time immensely by eliminating travelling to shopping malls. To elucidate, a recent survey conducted by The Times on March 2019 showed that more than 80 percent people prefer to purchase goods online rather than visiting the shopping complex. The main disadvantage of shopping through internet is the untrue and deceptive information provided by the sellers. This is to say, that people have to completely rely on the images of the product available on shopping links, without physically inspecting them. A a consequence, when the product is delivered it can vary in term of quality, size and colour. To exemplify, a recent research by The Market Plus, a leading research organisation, found that more than 80 percent of online shopping ell dissatisfied with the quality of delivering products. In conclusion, it is undoubtedly true that electronic shopping is widely practiced by people worldwide. Although, internet purchasing provide the benefit to people to buy goods at any hour of the day along with easy return and exchange, but the disadvantage associated with this is biased information available about the product.
The advancement in technology has made online
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shopping
increasingly
popular among several individuals. This essay will
first
, discuss convenience and easy return or exchange policy as the advantages and
further
, outline false and misleading information about
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goods
as the major disadvantage.

The foremost advantage of electronic
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shopping
is that it is
effortlessly
accessible and comfortable. In the other words,
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people
can
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get
access to
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shopping
websites anytime as per their convenience.
As a result
, this has saved
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people
's time
immensely
by eliminating travelling to
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shopping
malls. To elucidate, a recent survey conducted by The Times on March 2019
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showed
that more than 80 percent
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people
prefer to
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purchase
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goods
online
rather
than visiting the
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shopping
complex.

The main disadvantage of
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shopping
through internet is the untrue and deceptive information provided by the sellers. This is to say, that
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people
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have to
completely rely on the images of the product available on
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shopping
links, without
physically
inspecting them.
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A a
consequence, when the product
is delivered
it can vary in term of quality, size and
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colour
. To exemplify, a recent research by The Market Plus, a leading research
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organisation
, found that more than 80 percent of online
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shopping
ell dissatisfied with the quality of delivering products.

In conclusion
, it is
undoubtedly
true that electronic
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shopping
is
widely
practiced by
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people
worldwide. Although, internet purchasing provide the benefit to
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
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goods
at any hour of the day along with easy return and exchange,
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but
the disadvantage associated with this
is biased
information available about the product.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people are doing their shopping on the internet, nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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